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Beautifully Dark

The gate's infraction
Clothed in innocent beauty
Endless sleep awaits 


Oct. 20, 2017
Halloween Senryu - Poetry Contest - Laura Loo

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James Inman

October 24, 2017 at 7:18 AM

Love the idea of the girl's innocence, unaware of what awaits her. Well done.

Beautiful Scars

October 24, 2017 at 5:31 AM

I love those 2 words together, beautifully dark.. seems soothing yet creepy. thank you and congrats :)

Andrea Dietrich

October 23, 2017 at 3:27 PM

I see that you and one other person put focus on the gate. That is very interesting to me!! Congrats on your fine win.

G. Jay

October 23, 2017 at 6:10 PM

really, cool. I used it to emphases a breech between two different worlds. That way, the reader could define who the villain or villains are.

Kim Rodrigues

October 23, 2017 at 2:00 PM

Nicely done! Congrats!

Charlie Smith

October 23, 2017 at 10:54 AM

Wonderful G. Jay, congratulations...

G. Jay

October 23, 2017 at 12:54 PM

Thanks

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

October 23, 2017 at 7:18 AM

Fabulously dark :) congratulations! xomo

G. Jay

October 23, 2017 at 12:55 PM

glad you enjoyed.

Jan Allison

October 20, 2017 at 5:55 PM

the title is perfect the imagery really is beautifully dark:-) hugs jan xx

G. Jay

October 20, 2017 at 11:38 PM

thanks but they are laura loo's words. I used her description when she was explaining the the-me of her contest.

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