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The gate's infraction Clothed in innocent beauty Endless sleep awaits Oct. 20, 2017 Halloween Senryu - Poetry Contest - Laura Loo

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James Inman

Date: 10/24/2017 7:18:00 AM

Love the idea of the girl's innocence, unaware of what awaits her. Well done.

Lu Loo

Date: 10/24/2017 5:31:00 AM

I love those 2 words together, beautifully dark.. seems soothing yet creepy. thank you and congrats :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/23/2017 3:27:00 PM

I see that you and one other person put focus on the gate. That is very interesting to me!! Congrats on your fine win.

G. Jay
Date: 10/23/2017 6:10:00 PM

really, cool. I used it to emphases a breech between two different worlds. That way, the reader could define who the villain or villains are.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 10/23/2017 2:00:00 PM

Nicely done! Congrats!

Charlie Smith

Date: 10/23/2017 10:54:00 AM

Wonderful G. Jay, congratulations...

G. Jay
Date: 10/23/2017 12:54:00 PM

Thanks

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 10/23/2017 7:18:00 AM

Fabulously dark :) congratulations! xomo

G. Jay
Date: 10/23/2017 12:55:00 PM

glad you enjoyed.

Jan Allison

Date: 10/20/2017 5:55:00 PM

the title is perfect the imagery really is beautifully dark:-) hugs jan xx

G. Jay
Date: 10/20/2017 11:38:00 PM

thanks but they are laura loo's words. I used her description when she was explaining the the-me of her contest.