Beach Sandcastle

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Written: October 31, 2023 ______________________________________________ Sea-veiled land has emeralds with shamrock Green grass has a soft and carpet-like hue Sandcastle at the beach with hay and rock Sea-veiled land has emeralds with shamrock The sun shines radiant gold, bathes, and shocks That it might be over soon with no clue. Sea-veiled land has emeralds with shamrock Green grass has a soft and carpet-like hue

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Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 11/1/2023 2:37:00 PM

dearest Sotto--there's something soothing, almost soulful about your Triolet. Perhaps because I love nature and sandcastles. Sandcastles, unfortunately, don't last long. You allude to that with the line 'that it might be over soon with no clue.' There's a subtle depth to your imagery and poetic voice. Am faving this one....a pleasant read. Have an enjoyable evening, Sara

Vijay Pandit

Date: 11/1/2023 6:21:00 AM

Sea-veiled land has emeralds with shamrock Green grass has a soft and carpet-like hue Sandcastle at the beach with hay and rock--beautiful images. Much enjoyed the tenor of your poem, my friend.

Ink Empress

Date: 10/31/2023 11:15:00 PM

Beautiful triolet, so well written with such soul warming imagery! I absolutely love the line “ The sun shines radiant gold, bathes, and shocks“ how gorgeous! and the way you’ve written also sea veiled land and emeralds, gives such an island vibe that truly resonate and is magical and touching! Profound triolet! As always your rhymes too are so unique! And the way you’ve also delivered so much depth through descriptive lines is impeccable! Sending you light always . Pleasure reading you