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Beach Blues

I came to the beach, for a little sunshine I came to the beach, for a little sunshine But you slunk through the shadows, and into my mind I look out to sea, to try and find peace I look out to sea, to try and find peace But I’m still tethered to you, like a mutt on a leash Memories of us, erupt like ‘bing’ hits Memories of us, erupt like ‘bing’ hits I want to forget, our beach wedding bliss So I lie on my back, and stare up at the sky So I lie on my back, and stare up at the sky Detesting you, and your new Barbie wife Knots of you form, inside of my stomach Knots of you form, inside of my stomach I try to undo them, but my fortitude plummets I hope that in time, I’ll be able to swim I hope that in time, I’ll be able to swim And my memories of you, will pour from my limbs ***based on typical blues music, where the first line is repeated and the third line is a "holler"/answer (rhyme scheme AAB)

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Date: 7/23/2011 12:59:00 PM
Hey, how fun this one landed for you in PD's interesting contest! congrats for this one. I remember seeing it before.
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Date: 7/22/2011 6:04:00 AM
Congrats Susan on a super special win with this terrific write so creative on beach and music combo.. excellent luv..
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Date: 7/22/2011 5:21:00 AM
Congratulations on the win with your wonderful poetry in P.D.'s contest Susan. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/30/2011 10:43:00 PM
I can't think of a better way to use blue for the beach than to sing the blues, Susan. I'd be blue too seeing that Barbie doll wife! good luck in the contest, Susan
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Date: 6/30/2011 9:51:00 PM
It is hard to let go of someone one has loved deeply. There will be better days, but healing takes time, and a little love, beginning with yourself. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest. Best wishes, Caroline.
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