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Away In a Dance Hall

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written - 12th July 2023
Away in a manger contest Re run Poetry Contest

Away in a dance hall
No dance for me yet
Then I saw you sat there
And broke out in sweat.

I walked up and asked you
Would you care to dance 
Your face was a picture
You said not a chance.

My dream had departed 
I felt such a fool
But my momma told me
Go fish in the pool.

Never make the first move
My papa did say
Stay sweet and delightful 
Till love comes your way.

So I’ll wait patiently 
With a smile and song
Whilst hoping and praying
My prince comes along.

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Kim Merryman

Date: 7/31/2023 7:39:00 PM

I like the positive spin you put on this, Belle! Congrats on your top win! Blessings, Kim M

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 8/2/2023 9:32:00 AM

Thank you and bless you Kim, comments appreciated… Belle

Terry Flood

Date: 7/31/2023 11:42:00 AM

Congrats on your win, Belle. I expect he had two left feet, anyway.

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 7/31/2023 11:48:00 AM

Maybe he did have two left feet, but if a prince came along I wouldn’t care about his feet. Thank you Terry… Belle

John Read

Date: 7/31/2023 10:54:00 AM

Congratulations sister Beryl on your No 1 spot,it was your poem, and your help that helped me write my one. xx

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 7/31/2023 11:27:00 AM

Thank you and bless you brother John, you are an excellent poet, look at what we did with our collaborations over the years, they are superb if I say it myself… Sis Belle

Jan Allison

Date: 7/31/2023 7:55:00 AM

I just loved this one Belle, !!Many congrats on your top placement and thanks for taking time to enter the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 7/31/2023 9:43:00 AM

Thank you Jan, I enjoyed writing for your contest, thanks to you too. Hugs Belle xx

Christuraj Alex

Date: 7/31/2023 7:18:00 AM

"So I’ll wait patiently With a smile and song" - Beautiful. Congratulations!

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 7/31/2023 9:41:00 AM

Thank you very much Christuraj, with a smile and a song life flows along… Belle

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/14/2023 4:31:00 PM

you took this in a sweet direction, Belle!! Much enjoyed.

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 7/14/2023 7:27:00 PM

Thank you Andrea, appreciated ~ Belle

John Watt

Date: 7/14/2023 1:07:00 PM

Belle, I imagine if we knew how most of those dreamy guys and gals really turned out, we'd probably be very grateful we didn't end up with them. Loved reading your story in lyric form and glad to know you ended up with a "keeper"! Hugs ~ John

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 7/14/2023 1:33:00 PM

Thank you John, you’re probably right about those guys and gals we thought were nice. So pleased you enjoyed the read… Hugs in return, Belle