Beryl Edmonds Poet Rhyme

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written - 12th July 2023
Away in a manger contest Re run Poetry Contest

 

Away In a Dance Hall

Away in a dance hall
No dance for me yet
Then I saw you sat there
And broke out in sweat.

I walked up and asked you
Would you care to dance 
Your face was a picture
You said not a chance.

My dream had departed 
I felt such a fool
But my momma told me
Go fish in the pool.

Never make the first move
My papa did say
Stay sweet and delightful 
Till love comes your way.

So I’ll wait patiently 
With a smile and song
Whilst hoping and praying
My prince comes along. 

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Kim Merryman July 31, 2023 at 7:39 PM I like the positive spin you put on this, Belle! Congrats on your top win! Blessings, Kim M Beryl Edmonds August 2, 2023 at 9:32 AM Thank you and bless you Kim, comments appreciated… Belle

Terry Flood July 31, 2023 at 11:42 AM Congrats on your win, Belle. I expect he had two left feet, anyway. Beryl Edmonds July 31, 2023 at 11:48 AM Maybe he did have two left feet, but if a prince came along I wouldn’t care about his feet. Thank you Terry… Belle

John Read July 31, 2023 at 10:54 AM Congratulations sister Beryl on your No 1 spot,it was your poem, and your help that helped me write my one. xx Beryl Edmonds July 31, 2023 at 11:27 AM Thank you and bless you brother John, you are an excellent poet, look at what we did with our collaborations over the years, they are superb if I say it myself… Sis Belle

Jan Allison July 31, 2023 at 7:55 AM I just loved this one Belle, !!Many congrats on your top placement and thanks for taking time to enter the contest:-) hugs Jan xx Beryl Edmonds July 31, 2023 at 9:43 AM Thank you Jan, I enjoyed writing for your contest, thanks to you too. Hugs Belle xx

Christuraj Alex July 31, 2023 at 7:18 AM "So I’ll wait patiently With a smile and song" - Beautiful. Congratulations! Beryl Edmonds July 31, 2023 at 9:41 AM Thank you very much Christuraj, with a smile and a song life flows along… Belle

Andrea Dietrich July 14, 2023 at 4:31 PM you took this in a sweet direction, Belle!! Much enjoyed. Beryl Edmonds July 14, 2023 at 7:27 PM Thank you Andrea, appreciated ~ Belle

John Watt July 14, 2023 at 1:07 PM Belle, I imagine if we knew how most of those dreamy guys and gals really turned out, we'd probably be very grateful we didn't end up with them. Loved reading your story in lyric form and glad to know you ended up with a "keeper"! Hugs ~ John Beryl Edmonds July 14, 2023 at 1:33 PM Thank you John, you’re probably right about those guys and gals we thought were nice. So pleased you enjoyed the read… Hugs in return, Belle

Gordon Mcconnell July 14, 2023 at 12:20 PM Nice pen Belle, lovely rhyme and flow too. Blessings,Gordon Beryl Edmonds July 14, 2023 at 12:49 PM Thank you very much indeed Gordon. Blessings in return. Belle

Joanna Daniel July 14, 2023 at 1:13 AM Well! Not everyone is a charming prince, I guess! Beautiful work, Belle:) Beryl Edmonds July 14, 2023 at 1:42 AM Thank you Joanna, I guess that too… Belle

John Read July 13, 2023 at 6:10 AM Hi sister Belle,your patience was rewarded when your hubby came along. It's a contest winner. Beryl Edmonds July 13, 2023 at 12:52 PM Hi brother John, yes you’re right I was rewarded well. Thank you. Sis Bel

David Fisher July 12, 2023 at 5:05 PM Looks like a contest winner! What do those princes know about women anyway, lol. Beryl Edmonds July 12, 2023 at 5:54 PM Ha! Not a lot I imagine.Thank you David ~ Belle :)

Panagiota Romios July 12, 2023 at 9:42 AM Belle, this is darling…. I so admire your ability to create a story in a poem. Keep it up, well done. Pangie Beryl Edmonds July 12, 2023 at 11:51 AM Thank you so much Pangie, I do enjoy writing a story through poetry and I’m pleased you enjoyed the read… Belle

Victor Buhagiar July 12, 2023 at 8:29 AM Sad in a way, you learned a lesson. Hugs. Beryl Edmonds July 12, 2023 at 11:49 AM Thank you Victor, the poem is fiction written for the contest. My prince came along fifty nine years ago when I was sweet sixteen… Belle