Len Gasun Poet Rhyme

Away At a Picnic

Away at a picnic
No spoons, forks nor plates
Some rich people panic 
They think of their fate.

But the poor ones keep calm
No whines nor complain
Wash their hands, on their palms-
Big leaves, green and plain

Away at a picnic
A huge boodle fight
All seafoods for your pick
For great meal delight

A long table of foods
On banana leaves
Rich and poor feel so good
To care, love and give.

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Kim Merryman August 1, 2023 at 6:39 PM Nicely done, Len! Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim M Len Gasun August 8, 2023 at 1:52 AM Thank you so much my dear poet friend Kim for reading my poem, your uplifting comments and your congratulatory greetings. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs...

Jan Allison July 31, 2023 at 8:30 AM Fabulous poem Len, I had to dock you a point as leaves and give dont rhyme. Many congrats on your placement and thanks for taking time to enter the contest:-) hugs Jan xx Jan Allison August 8, 2023 at 4:15 AM I found once I started with the 'away in' theme i couldnt stop lol. I think i wrote about 4 in the end:-) keep the second one as I may re run the contest again xx hugs jan xx Len Gasun August 8, 2023 at 1:51 AM Thank you so much for acknowledging my poem in your contest through my win my dear poet friend Jan. I appreciated it so much. It means a lot to me. Thanks for the inspiration too. I even wrote 2 poems from your contest challenge. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs

Susan Ashley July 23, 2023 at 8:52 AM My dear poet friend, Len, the beautiful spirit of your poem is uplifting. I enjoyed the contrast drawn between the rich and poor, and the circumstances which brings them together. Your poetic verse, so rich in imagery, brings me to this picnic with ease and finesse. I especially enjoyed the last stanza for a grand finale to a superb poem. The use of the word "boodle" is delightful! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Len Gasun July 29, 2023 at 3:32 AM Thank you so much for reading my poem, your uplifting comments and your warm wishes my dear poet friend Susan. Thank you thank you so much especially for the inspiration. I will come and visit you again soon if you don't mind. You're an amazing poet. Blessings to you always. Hugs

Len Gasun July 22, 2023 at 9:29 AM Written Poem: July 22,2023 11.28pm Len Gasun August 8, 2023 at 1:55 AM Away in a Manger Contest Re run Contest Judged: 7/31/2023 8:58:00 AM Sponsored by: JAN ALLISON Place 2 ( up to 1-5 multi-w & 1 hm)