Autumn Flier

leaving on a breeze swirling red yellow brown page embarks into blue

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Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/4/2011 5:58:00 PM

thanks for stopping by and commenting, just wanted to let you know..the senryu which won were not exactly true to form..given a choice i would not do 5/7/5..what you have written above does not follow haiku form either..at if you are speaking of leaves in haiku you should be very literal ie leaves on a breeze/swirling red yellow brown/ blue sky...this would be more haiku=like ;) Light & Love

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 12/14/2010 5:18:00 PM

ahhhhhhhh...I just got it LOL SKY! if you put your ... at the end of line two to show where your cut was I think I would have got it faster..slow old woman here! Light & Love

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/7/2010 3:58:00 AM

Congratulations on your win John in Rick Parise's contest "A Leaf In The Wind (Autumn)". Love, Carol

Francine Roberts

Date: 9/6/2010 4:41:00 PM

beautiful, congrats on your HM

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/6/2010 11:17:00 AM

Very nice, John! congratulations on the HM. LUv, Andrea

Wilma Neels

Date: 9/6/2010 4:29:00 AM

John I love the idea of an autumn flier.. congrats on your win ;) Wilma

Iolanda Scripca

Date: 9/5/2010 8:44:00 PM

Beautiful and colorful expression of the Fall. Congrats, dear John. Love, iolanda

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/5/2010 7:04:00 PM

Congratulations on the HM win in the contest, John

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/5/2010 5:14:00 PM

Congrats John on your HM in Rick's contest... a lovely poem and great honor for u to enjoy with luv..

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/1/2010 9:30:00 AM

Thank you for sharing your poetry John. Poets here offer such diverse writings and to me it is a pleasure to read each and everyone. I will not be here at the Soup to read from Friday through Monday. I hope you will find mountains of inspiration during that time. I look forward to reading when I return. Have a great weekend. Love, Carol