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Atmospheric Pressure

When the pressure in the atmosphere gets low, I take in a breath deep and let it out slow, My inbuilt barometer begins to work, The pain in my ear surfaces with a smirk; It is going to rain, my forecast is clear, The drums have announced it loud, played by my ear, Ouch! This low pressure is sure making me pay, Keep the cotton ready, plug him out, I say; I drink some water, grit my teeth and bear it, It will take some time, but I shall soon be fit, When the pressure in the atmosphere goes high, My ear pain will be forgotten by and by. 08/29/17 (11 syllables per line)

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Date: 9/13/2017 1:47:00 PM
I dig this, Jo, very well done. It's always a pleasure to read competent rhyme from such a smooth pen like yours. As a tiny critique/suggestion in reading the 4th line I feel like "surfaces" interrupts the melodic cadence a bit (but certainly still works). After a few thorough read throughs I tried it with 3 one syllable words replacing it and it fit my ear a bit better. Something like "...comes to life with a smirk". I'm an ignorant Texan so don't stress it too much- Its wonderful as is
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Date: 9/11/2017 5:54:00 PM
Thanks for what you said on my hot summer day poem. that is what I was trying for. SUCCINCT!
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Date: 9/7/2017 7:18:00 AM
Delightful and informative poetic writing dear friend, Jo! No surprise it was picked a winner! Wonderfully done!
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Date: 9/6/2017 5:49:00 PM
Glad to see this won. I SURE do like it!
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Date: 9/5/2017 7:34:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win Jo, Atmospheric pressure affects the way I feel as well such as headache and lethargic, well written. :))
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Date: 9/4/2017 11:32:00 PM
Congratulations for placement, Jo.
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Date: 9/4/2017 7:21:00 PM
I have one of those inbuilt barometers, too! Congratulations on yours bringing you a nice contest placement!
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Date: 9/1/2017 6:55:00 PM
Very nicely written. I don't think I would like an earache every time it's going to rain. Best of luck in the contest!
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Date: 9/1/2017 11:05:00 AM
Great pressure on the contest Jo lol...best of luck my friend...god bless...^WW^
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Date: 8/31/2017 2:32:00 PM
Fine write Jo, nice imagery and good thoughts portrayed. Well penned!
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Date: 8/31/2017 2:11:00 PM
i hope i won't be needing a hearing aid... emotional or physical noise can be really bothersome... lovely work, jo..huggs
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Date: 8/30/2017 4:40:00 PM
This is such a clever entry Jo! I think Shadow will love it! "It is going to rain, my forecast is clear,The drums have announced it loud, played by my ear," These lines make your poem standout brilliantly! : )
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Date: 8/30/2017 3:22:00 PM
The ear pressure forecasts the rain!..Nicely penned Jo
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Date: 8/30/2017 12:36:00 AM
Ha ha ha ... The atmosphere laughs too ... So nicely done ... Thank you for liking my Ripples in Water ...
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Date: 8/29/2017 5:30:00 PM
gosh, I wish I had something to say about this topic. It's one of the few I have left to attack!! And I have to do it soon. I think you did a great job basing the theme on your body reactions to changes in pressure!
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Date: 8/29/2017 3:06:00 PM
- Beautiful written even in pain, Jo - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 8/29/2017 2:14:00 PM
A deep title and a light poem that is scattered about this afternoon with clouds capable of producing cannon ball sized poetry-soup. (I hope this helps!)
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Date: 8/29/2017 11:51:00 AM
Lovely, Jo, I thought of writing something similar... but I didn't.. Since I'm single sided hearing the pressure gets worse and the ringing is louder than the noise around me... luck in the contest... Hugs Eve
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Date: 8/29/2017 10:14:00 AM
Sorry to hear this. Except for your pain, I enjoyed the form, meter and rhyme. Well written and good luck in the contest.
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Date: 8/29/2017 8:24:00 AM
Enjoyed your rhyme, Jo! GL in contest!
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Date: 8/29/2017 6:56:00 AM
This is really nice Jo, kind of seems like a lot of pressure pushing down these days, but like you said, the pain will soon be forgotten.
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