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Asylum Admission

control was the crucial key
evading limits of sanity
resolutely focused on normality

determined to linger unwaveringly
vague lines of uncertainty
that gradually blur inevitably

as reason loses clarity
boundary crossed perplexedly 
control was the crucial key

© September 2013—Kim van Breda

Copyright © Kim Van Breda | Year Posted 2013

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Mike Bayles Date: 10/22/2013 2:04:00 PM I like this poem. It reflects the person's state of mind well. Login to Reply Kim Van Breda Date: 10/22/2013 2:08:00 PM Thanks Mike-- an honest reflection.

Joseph May Date: 10/7/2013 10:29:00 PM well penned Kim.....best wishes Login to Reply

Bl Devnath Date: 10/5/2013 8:13:00 AM It's a great poem penned from the deepest feeling and you have shown excellently how the unseen qualities of mind can be controlled with the key of consciousness. A nice creation of inner thoughts. Lovely done. Loved always, bl Login to Reply

Ralph Mason Date: 9/30/2013 9:16:00 PM well done Kim. I like how you start and end on the same line. Feels like a never ending circle. Warm thoughts, Ralph Login to Reply

Nette Onclaud Date: 9/30/2013 1:02:00 PM thought-provoking with lines that captures the borderline between being sane and not... i once wrote a one-liner in high-school that went: " to be sane is to have moments of sanity.."... greeat stuff!..:) huggs Login to Reply

Jon A Cavanaugh Date: 9/30/2013 8:31:00 AM Very well done. Bravo! Login to Reply

Poet Tacito Date: 9/30/2013 7:41:00 AM Yes! I love this. One of your stronger writings yet. Such a battle of self & sanity in your lines. Awesome job! Login to Reply Kim Van Breda Date: 9/30/2013 7:45:00 AM Thanks Drake You are always one of the first to comment on my scribbling's and I love you for that-- and of course your ongoing encouragement.