Kim Van Breda Poet Rhyme

Asylum Admission

control was the crucial key
evading limits of sanity
resolutely focused on normality

determined to linger unwaveringly
vague lines of uncertainty
that gradually blur inevitably

as reason loses clarity
boundary crossed perplexedly 
control was the crucial key

© September 2013—Kim van Breda

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Mike Bayles October 22, 2013 at 2:04 PM I like this poem. It reflects the person's state of mind well. Kim Van Breda October 22, 2013 at 2:08 PM Thanks Mike-- an honest reflection.

Joseph May October 7, 2013 at 10:29 PM well penned Kim.....best wishes

Bl Devnath October 5, 2013 at 8:13 AM It's a great poem penned from the deepest feeling and you have shown excellently how the unseen qualities of mind can be controlled with the key of consciousness. A nice creation of inner thoughts. Lovely done. Loved always, bl

Ralph Mason September 30, 2013 at 9:16 PM well done Kim. I like how you start and end on the same line. Feels like a never ending circle. Warm thoughts, Ralph

Nette Onclaud September 30, 2013 at 1:02 PM thought-provoking with lines that captures the borderline between being sane and not... i once wrote a one-liner in high-school that went: " to be sane is to have moments of sanity.."... greeat stuff!..:) huggs

Jon A Cavanaugh September 30, 2013 at 8:31 AM Very well done. Bravo!

Poet Tacito September 30, 2013 at 7:41 AM Yes! I love this. One of your stronger writings yet. Such a battle of self & sanity in your lines. Awesome job! Kim Van Breda September 30, 2013 at 7:45 AM Thanks Drake You are always one of the first to comment on my scribbling's and I love you for that-- and of course your ongoing encouragement.