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Astir

Cinqopet

Upon the path I walk tonight,
 Beneath the pale and silver light,
  The world appears so very white.
 A delicate snowy scene,
Serene, almost like a dream.

The wind has started up a song,
 It sings of things that went along,
  The winter days are growing long.
 I watched the bare branches high,
Touch the cold and moonless sky.

My little horse must think it strange,
 To stop without a farm in range,
  No other travelers exchange.
 The lone sound is a soft sweep,
While the world is fast asleep.

I feel a call to linger here,
 To face my future without fear,
  To hold the moment very dear.
 I have promises to keep,
Before my gentle long sleep.

I know the journey has no end,
 Around each curve, the pathways bend,
  On forces I can not depend.
 The path ahead, dark and vast,
My silent choice, here at last.

A snowflake briefs a horse’s blink.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2025

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Williams Avatar
September 13, 2026 at 12:27 PM
William, nice job of weaving together imagery-laden scenes with a steady, rhythmic backbeat! Congrats on placing in Gregory's contest! Blessings & very best, Bartholomew
Etgen-Baker Avatar
December 16, 2025 at 4:08 PM
stunning poem with captivating imagery....a great contest entry. Faving.
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
December 16, 2025 at 5:33 PM
Rhythmic sounding with a conversion from three, eight-syllabic words, to two broken seven-syllabic words, is a challenge in and of itself. Seems simplistic to the sponsor whose numerous examples are exposed with the tag, ‘CINCOPET’.
Rodgers Avatar
December 15, 2025 at 9:12 AM
Hello HP, I really liked how you captured that quiet winter stillness with the soft sweep, and even the horse’s blink made it feel alive. It left me smiling, as I’d just stepped out into the snow myself. We just got 7" of snow yesterday. Autumn Blessings, HP, Daniel
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
December 15, 2025 at 9:44 AM
I made a change and hoped you read the updated version. Thanks, Daniel. Aloha, William.
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