Notes About The Poem

Author's Notes: "As Liquid Fire Melts," is a collaborated poem that Liam McDaid and I completed together on April 21, 2016. This particular couplet is replete with very rich and emotive imagery. It is also one from whence both of us crafted, we believe, some very moving verses celebrating the warmth of love and beauty in one's life, and that very special moment when a person finds his or her soul mate so they can share their love unconditionally. We likened the actual theme -- "as liquid fire melts" -- to be that touchstone by which each of us seek to find our real emotions, our unconditional love for that special person in our life, and our ultimate path and destiny to God. Love is indeed eternal, and so are the starlight whispers of angels true! (Gary Bateman - April 23, 2016) (Unrhymed Couplet)

Categories: allegory, god, imagery, life, love, metaphor, and symbolism.

 

As Liquid Fire Melts

As Liquid Fire Melts

As liquid fire melts with twinkling sunshine in your eyes, 
Opening wings now embrace deeply all of my true emotions.

Feeling the warmth of your beating heart now fluttering so,
I see a radiant chain of daisies growing in the deep green grass.
 
Every choice I have ever made throughout my long life,
Has led me now to you at this very special moment in time. 

Beholding ivory silk starlight whispers of Heavenly angels true, 
I have now a clear vision of my life, my fate, and my destiny. 

Becoming the richest person in this giant, lonely world—
Means finding you and sharing our love unconditionally.

All real emotions we have beholding in this life of ours,
Are part of that God-given sensitivity from the Almighty.

Truly, as liquid fire melts beyond in great stars of the cosmos,
I think of you, our love, and the starlight whispers of angels true!

Gary Bateman and Liam McDaid, A Collaborated Poem 
Copyright © All Rights Reserved – April 21, 2016
(Unrhymed Couplet)
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Fiery Avatar
May 17, 2016 at 2:22 AM
Hello Gary, what a magical pen the two of you have...I have worked with Liam and i know he's a wonderful poet. Once again, I am elated to read his co write with you. A7 from me and now i am adding this to my fav:)...Cheers ~ Red~FIery
Bateman Avatar
May 17, 2016 at 3:48 PM
Hello Red Fiery, Thanks so much here for your most gracious comments!! Thanks too for the 7/FAV!! Liam has told me about your wonderful poetry as well. I will plan to read more of your poems over time. I invite you to read any of my other poems as you have time to do so. Liam and I have done a series of co-writes over time since 2014. Many of those co-writes appeared in my first book of poetry published in April 2015, under the title: "Conversations with My Muse." My second book planned for next year is one which will feature a full-length Novella and a collection of short stories and flash-fiction writes. Further ahead for Book Three -- I plan to have an even larger collection of selected poetry. Never A Dull Moment!! Cheers and Best Wishes Always, Gary
Capitano Avatar
May 16, 2016 at 10:32 AM
Love the metaphor of stars with love in the ending; very poignant.
Bateman Avatar
May 16, 2016 at 12:55 PM
Thanks Phil. This particular metaphor did turn out very well. I know that both Liam and I liked it -- and we're both thrilled that you liked it as well! Cheers and Best Wishes Always, Gary
Makama Avatar
May 2, 2016 at 1:23 PM
This is awesome... Thank you so much for this wonderful share
Bateman Avatar
May 16, 2016 at 12:52 PM
Thanks Funom for your wonderful comment here and for your observation!! I hope all is well by you!! Continued Best Wishes, Gary
Lindley Avatar
April 30, 2016 at 9:38 PM
As a team , you guys never fail to deliver exceptional poetry, especially in the romantic verse department! Congrats to you both on creating this worthy gem..A7
Bateman Avatar
May 16, 2016 at 12:51 PM
Thanks so much Robert, my great friend!! And that's for the "TR" too. I guess that both Liam and I do have a soft spot particularly for romantic writes. Love is always a great topic to write about. Hope all is well by you and the family!! I will be in touch again soon!! Cheers and Best, Gary
Callus Avatar
April 27, 2016 at 2:43 PM
A lovely and romantic collaboration by two talents who are well acquainted with each other. Well done Gary & Liam!! ~ Regards // paul
Bateman Avatar
April 27, 2016 at 4:29 PM
Thanks Paul!! Liam and I plan to do some more of these in the future. I'm really glad that you liked this one. Cheers and Best, Gary
Mcdaid Avatar
April 25, 2016 at 9:01 AM
passing you a warm smile thank you deeply gary your pen breathed with fire on this one pal love how it all came together
Bateman Avatar
April 25, 2016 at 4:13 PM
Thanks Liam Mate!! I look forward to your post of our poem this next week. This one came out very well!! Cheers and Best, Gary
Petersen Potter Avatar
April 23, 2016 at 10:49 AM
Hi Gary n' Liam !:))This is the most very beautiful,romantic,tender,sweet,passionate n' captivating love poem,you've written here my dearest friends.Just dazzling!All so very beautifully written.Wow!Just awesome!I love it!A most very beautiful, heartfelt,romantic,dreamy,heart melting away enchanting love poem to be held very close to my heart.smiling.This is so very beautiful n' sweet!Just amazing!So wonderful!I truly enjoy it!A true glowing golden gem!Just beautiful!Excellent imagery!Outstanding collaboration!Your pens are truly mighty golden!A 7 + + + to each!A Fav!Wishing you a very lovely weekend!In His light!God bless you always!:)Love n' hugs!xoxox D.^O^
Bateman Avatar
April 23, 2016 at 12:24 PM
Hello Dear "D" . . . Thanks so much for your wonderful comments and the super great rating here. I'm very pleased, as I know Liam is too, that you liked this collaborated effort. The couplets are always a lot of fun to do. I will be in touch again soon. Liam may be responding later. Cheers and All the Best!! Gary
Andresen Avatar
April 23, 2016 at 9:07 AM
- A beautiful poem filled with love and warm feelings - A pleasure to see you co write again my dear friends Gary and Liam - ..... applied to my particular collection - hugs // Sun :)
Bateman Avatar
April 23, 2016 at 10:01 AM
Thanks Dear One "Sun"!! I went ahead and posted this ahead of Liam. (I believe he may be away temporarily.) I know he will probably post this one later. Yes, for sure, it's great to be back in the co-writing vein once again. Much to write and many projects to do!! Cheers and Best, Gary
Trifiatis Avatar
April 23, 2016 at 8:47 AM
Melting poetry of gigantic proportions! A seven to each of you, dear Gary and dear Liam! Marvelously romantic!
Bateman Avatar
April 23, 2016 at 10:02 AM
Thanks Demetrios!! I know that Liam will be quite pleased too. I expect him to probably post this one later too. (And thanks for the top rating too!!) Cheers and Best, Gary
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