Premiere Contest WinnerAs Autumn's Breeze

As Autumn's breeze grows colder still
A blizzard blasts an icy chill
Snow flakes dance on coats and skin;
Jack Frost comes skating in

And on his cape, where crystals form
In complex beauty to transform
the air, the trees, the earth and sky
A layer of peace can catch the eye

Autumn, enrobed in greens and browns,
must leave the scene with bows and frowns
And so, she does, with graceful ease
Her curtain calls felt in the breeze

So gleaming, fresh-faced, storming higher
Jack will force us round the fire
Or out with him to work and play
While he trims the first light from each day

He'll sit and wait, as so must we
And hibernate, or play with glee
'Til Spring steps in to thaw his fun
When he'll retire in her soft sun
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Daniel Avatar
September 6, 2016 at 3:11 AM
I could feel the rhythmic flow of your lovely poem, David:) congratulations on top spot:) well deserved:)
Babcock Avatar
September 5, 2016 at 11:50 AM
Congrats on 1st place. love phyl
U.D Palawon  Avatar
September 5, 2016 at 4:35 AM
Congrats on your 1st place. Keep it up! Sunita :)
Lindsay Avatar
September 4, 2016 at 12:44 AM
Thank you all very much for such positive and encouraging comments. These (and the contest win, of course) have really made my day :)
Krampe Avatar
September 3, 2016 at 8:58 PM
Congrats on your win, David.
Steele Avatar
September 3, 2016 at 5:44 PM
Very nice, David. Wonderfully vivid description. Well deserved win. Randy Steele
Scars Avatar
September 3, 2016 at 4:56 PM
David, beautiful flow, congrats on your well deserved top placement! :)-luloo
Allison Avatar
September 3, 2016 at 3:44 PM
I'm SO glad that I was right David :-):-) many congrats on your top spot:-) hugs Jan xx
Roper Avatar
September 3, 2016 at 3:40 PM
What a beautiful poem, David, I love the way you dressed the scene. Congratulations on your 1st place win. Hugs Eve
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 3, 2016 at 3:39 PM
David, your couplet is indeed beautiful. It flows so smoothly. I can see why it has taken top honors. Congratulations on your first place! : ) 7
Hamilton Avatar
September 3, 2016 at 3:08 PM
this is so beautiful David congrats on your well earned 1st place hugs
Haight Avatar
September 3, 2016 at 2:49 PM
I like how you addressed this seasonal theme in such a fun way, David. Congratulations on your First Place Trophy win! Sandra
Hay Avatar
September 3, 2016 at 2:13 PM
I love the playful fun write, well done on your win David! Warm regards, Laura.
Garcia Avatar
August 29, 2016 at 10:26 AM
This breezes like a winner to me. Beautiful
May Avatar
August 23, 2016 at 11:55 AM
Very nicely penned...I enjoyed the read
Grahamburglar Avatar
August 21, 2016 at 5:13 PM
I really like this. I think you'll do well in the contest. That aside, the imagery, feel and flow of this one are almost enough to get me in the mood for winter -- almost. Excellent job and good luck! -G
Allison Avatar
August 21, 2016 at 5:07 PM
Absolutely brilliant David I love the way you wove the words in so cleverly into your lovely rhyme - am hoping to see this high on the winners list:-) hugs Jan xx 7
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