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no place can I hide
atoms of me circle you
hope without a trace
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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November 25, 2009 at 3:27 AM
Oh, Jimbo ... You Went To Mt. Everest For this One 'Eh ... Not Only Deep, but a Higher Plane of Conscioness... MoonBee
Guzzi Avatar
November 15, 2009 at 6:42 AM
most excellent..all this romance makes me wonder who the lucky lady is? Light & Love
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October 25, 2009 at 6:02 PM
nice poem, keep up the good work!!
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October 21, 2009 at 7:14 PM
What a fantastic senryu!! I almost missed this one!! Love it ! ps...soup mail reply!!
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October 19, 2009 at 1:17 PM
When someone is ever on our minds, it can certainly feel like there is no place to hide. "Hope without a trace" is quite a provocative and powerful ending to this wonderful senryu, Jim. Awesome work! Love you, Carolyn
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October 18, 2009 at 9:30 PM
Hoping without a trace, I've read that line three times, what a ponder, nice job Mr. Marshall
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October 18, 2009 at 6:50 PM
LOVE the second line!! Outstanding senryu James! ~Trudy~
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October 18, 2009 at 3:18 PM
Yes, Jim, love is a circle and like a circle it has no ending. Like this senryu. ...Keep writing, Gert
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October 18, 2009 at 7:12 AM
i can feel myself in a circle of love--beautifully written my good friend-,a fav..Charma
Guzzi Avatar
October 18, 2009 at 6:03 AM
Well I'd want more than a trace left behind LOL. Light, Love & down comforters
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October 17, 2009 at 3:29 PM
Interesting Senryu. Keep writing. Sara
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