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Aquarius

I go where mountain streams converge
And stand with pitcher on the verge
Of a transparent tranquil pool
Where waters merge lucent and cool
There is the grass sparkling with dew
I dip the jar in aqua blue
It overflows its precious gift
As with both hands I gently lift
To raise the contents to my lips
So that I take the first few sips
And then I drink the rest in haste
There is ambrosia in the taste
That brings to mind my faithful muse
The sky is filled with scarlet hues
I am entranced and stay until
The sun goes up; once more I fill
The jar with water to the brim
On wings of time I fly and skim
Till I arrive at heaven’s gates
Then walk to where my master waits
The zodiac path is where he lives
He lays the rules and ever gives
To freedom lovers ample space 
To go about at their own pace
And cure the fragile human race
To make the world a better place.
A water bearer I shall be
With care to serve eternally.


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Author: Paul Callus ~ 13th July 2014 
Contest: Zodiac Sign
Sponsor: Leonora Galinta
Placing: 1st
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Shetley Avatar
September 14, 2014 at 12:07 PM
I love poems with astrology themes. Scorpio here! This is great!
Callus Avatar
September 14, 2014 at 2:18 PM
Hi Thvia! Thank you for stopping by with your lovely comments. I wonder how Scorpio and Aquarius relate to each other; I have a feeling they can both be stubborn! // paul
A. Sharma Avatar
August 26, 2014 at 11:32 AM
Very beautiful write Paul n a great win! Big congrats ,, enjoyed this masterpiece on Facebook page today !
Callus Avatar
August 26, 2014 at 11:55 AM
Thank you Upma; I enjoyed your 'Pisces' entry too. Yes, I tried out the new soup gadget...it offers interesting possibilities, then posted it on fb. You can format your fav poems that way and save them in a file/folder in your computer. // paul
Allison Avatar
August 25, 2014 at 9:08 AM
many congrats on this beautiful write Paul I'm aquarius too:-) Hugs jan xxx
Allison Avatar
August 25, 2014 at 10:56 AM
Sounds like fun but I swim like a stone I nearly drowned when i was 6! I am counting down the days until we visit Malta:-) Hugs Jan xx
Callus Avatar
August 25, 2014 at 10:53 AM
Thank you Jan....perhaps we can make a splash together!:) hugs // paul
Mohn Avatar
August 24, 2014 at 7:09 PM
Congrats to you Paul on your water sign winner
Callus Avatar
August 25, 2014 at 10:52 AM
Thank you David; your support is appreciated. // paul
Lindley Avatar
August 24, 2014 at 2:43 PM
Congrats on your great win with this gem. Adding this to my fav list my friend! I was locked into it from the first verse enjoying until the very last word!
Callus Avatar
August 24, 2014 at 6:07 PM
Hi Robert my friend! Thank you for reading, commenting plus the congrats & fave. I'm pleased with this result, but you did extremely well yourself...well done!! // paul
Andresen Avatar
August 24, 2014 at 11:18 AM
- Hey Paul, congratulations on your first place in the contest: Zodiac Sign, sponsored by: Leonora Galinta - A very well written poem! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Callus Avatar
August 24, 2014 at 6:03 PM
Thank you Anne Lise. You too received a merited top placing! /x/ paul
Gasun Avatar
August 24, 2014 at 10:00 AM
A very beautiful poem on zodiac sign you’ve penned my dear poet friend, Paul! I enjoyed thoroughly the read. Congratulations on your great win! So much thanks as well for your loving support. Biggest hugs and cheers! Love lots always, Leonora
Callus Avatar
August 24, 2014 at 6:00 PM
Hi Leonora! It was worth waiting for this lovely result:) Thank you once again for placing me top of the winners' list. Looking forward to your next contest. Hugs :) // paul
Sietesantos Avatar
August 24, 2014 at 9:59 AM
Paul, congratulations, my friend, on a TOP of the class win! Excellent write for a well-deserved placement! Pandita
Callus Avatar
August 24, 2014 at 5:57 PM
Thank you Pandita, both for the congrats and lovely comments. You did extremely well yourself:) // paul
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July 19, 2014 at 11:28 AM
Donnez-moi une vere de votre l'eau, mon ami. A remarkable poem about the water bearer. You and my late husband share the same astrological sign. Your poem has brilliant imagery. Aquarians are also know for their intelligence and leadership qualities. These are yours as well. Wishing you success in the contest, dear friend. Love and blessings, carolyn
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July 19, 2014 at 12:36 PM
Hi Carolyn! With you I am always ready to share! Your surprise visit made my day...and so did your lovely comments! Wonder if you still got any more things left in that wish basket of yours:) Love and peace......paul
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July 18, 2014 at 9:29 AM
I love how you converted the Zodiac into a celebration of God.
Callus Avatar
July 18, 2014 at 10:40 AM
Thank you Richard! You delve well into the contents; it's easy to give information, but I wanted to wrap it up in a different texture. I do appreciate your comments. // paul
Smith Avatar
July 14, 2014 at 9:05 PM
Fantastic Write, Paul m;y friend! good luck in the contest.. Hugs.. Arlene
Callus Avatar
July 15, 2014 at 2:58 PM
Thank you for commenting and liking, Arlene! Hugs to you too my friend. // paul
Marcum Wong Avatar
July 14, 2014 at 4:36 PM
Water explains this sign's nature of nourishing the earth with its life giving energies. Like its solid state, ice; and gaseous state, steam (water vapor) Aquarius has many admirable qualities it is able to morph into when needed. Your poem expresses this in the most lovely poetic manner. A most beautiful expression any Aquarius would want to keep. I have my rising in Aq. as does my husband and it helps us relate to each other. Bravo Paul! I loved this!
Callus Avatar
July 14, 2014 at 5:05 PM
Thank you for your lovely and informative comments, Connie. I ought to employ you as my personal post commentator:) [txs for the breakfast, too!] // paul
Deschler Avatar
July 13, 2014 at 7:47 PM
I was born a Pisces, so I too share a kinship and a love for water.... I felt a sense of calm and peacefulness as I read these beautiful word. This is a terrific write, Paul! Good luck in Leonora's contest!
Callus Avatar
July 14, 2014 at 10:40 AM
Hi Kelly! I am pleased you felt the tranquil feel in this write; I meant it to be that way (painted a peaceful environment, too). Thank you for the great comments!:) // paul
Andresen Avatar
July 13, 2014 at 12:25 PM
- Aquarius stands for independence and intellect - symbolizes freedom, revolution, originality, otherness and openness ...... yes, it fits well! - Beautifully written a winning poem in Leonora's contest :) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Callus Avatar
July 14, 2014 at 10:24 AM
Many thanks, Anne Lise! I appreciate you generous comments! As always, txs for the welcome visit:) /x/ paul
Dietrich Avatar
July 13, 2014 at 10:10 AM
I can see the Aquarius in you, Paul. And I hope you continue to surprise me!
Callus Avatar
July 13, 2014 at 11:55 AM
I do my best, but I make sure I keep my feet on the ground! I know my limitations. // paul
A. Sharma Avatar
July 13, 2014 at 1:59 AM
Real masterpiece coming of a great pen Paul ! Sure winner,, is it u ? Gl in contest! Oh yes for this one u don't need any ,, it's so awesome //Upma//
Callus Avatar
July 13, 2014 at 4:03 AM
Many many thanks dear Upma! These are not just comments, but compliments! You are too kind, but I still love it:) I don't get pampered like this everyday! I do appreciate it. // paul
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July 13, 2014 at 12:14 AM
wowowow, this is probably the best zodiac poem I've read yet because it really captures the essence of your sign. It IS your sign, isn't it? I am earth girl (my poem was an oldie that I entered in this contest, a sonnet called Earth's Daughter) Anyway, I noticed in my life that I never really had a real friendship with an Aquarius. the men of that sign never gravitated toward me either. They are quite different from Virgos, but they ARE the sign of the age of love and peace!
Callus Avatar
July 13, 2014 at 3:36 AM
Oh! that's a long wow! Thank you Andrea...I take it that you enjoyed this write!:) Yes, Aquarius is my sign, but don't tar all Aquarians with the same brush! Some (or even one)might surprise you:) // paul
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
July 12, 2014 at 7:10 PM
:) you still have the beat and rhyme i miss you here in Soup with your poems :D!! break my leg :P
Callus Avatar
July 13, 2014 at 3:28 AM
Good day Olive_eloi! I love being missed:) Waiting and anticipation are the spice of life...sometimes:) txs for the nice comments...but my leg feels sore!!:) // paul
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