Anorexic

Skin and bones, some say she's too thin Kind of looks like a frail stick Each day she runs, fast paced Lost look in her eyes Eats less and less Torn and sad One word Numb Written on 10/7/2015 Infinitian Form

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Skat A

Date: 10/19/2015 11:26:00 PM

Laura, Congrats on your win. --SKAT :)

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/20/2015 5:41:00 PM

Thank you for the kind congrats, Skat :)

Balveen Cheema

Date: 10/17/2015 7:08:00 AM

Congrats on this anorexican win!

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/17/2015 11:54:00 AM

Thank you very much, Balveen :)

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 10/17/2015 1:24:00 AM

Congrats on ur awesome winning write Laura!

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/17/2015 11:54:00 AM

Thank you much, Dr. Upma :)

Michael Tor

Date: 10/17/2015 1:13:00 AM

Laura nice win. Congratulations!!!

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/17/2015 11:54:00 AM

Thank you, Michael. You are too kind :)

Carrie Richards

Date: 10/16/2015 8:03:00 PM

A difficult challenge, and you picked a difficult subject. I'm glad to see you hit a home run!! Congrats !!

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/16/2015 8:36:00 PM

THank you, Carrie. It is hard to know some really suffer in this way. Glad you liked my poem :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/16/2015 7:39:00 PM

way to go. I really liked yours and am glad to see the judge did too!

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/16/2015 8:35:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea. I appreciate your kind words :)

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 10/16/2015 5:11:00 PM

well, this one caught my attention for personal reasons as i live with this condition...that aside, you've made very good use of single syllable words to create a coherent and hard hitting piece...a slight niggle, i don't like to see 'kind of' in a poem, and if it hadn't been for that this would have placed higher - congrats on your win in my contest!

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/16/2015 6:43:00 PM

THank you, Charlotte! I kind of know what you mean! Just kidding!! I appreciate all of the hard work that you put into your most excellent contest!

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/16/2015 4:57:00 PM

Laura, congratulations on your win:-)Alexis

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/16/2015 6:43:00 PM

Thank you, Alexis!

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/16/2015 4:45:00 PM

Back again, Laura, to congratulate you on your nice win! Hugs, Sandra

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/16/2015 6:44:00 PM

Thank you, Sandra :)

Jan Allison

Date: 10/16/2015 4:35:00 PM

Dropping back with my congrats Laura - I've worked with students as young as 11 who have issues with their weight - simply heartbreaking:-9 hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/16/2015 6:44:00 PM

Thank you, Jan. I know, it's hard to see this in young ones.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 10/8/2015 10:47:00 PM

Good job of saying so much in so few words/syllables! Good luck in the contest. Janice

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/15/2015 2:55:00 PM

Thank you, Janice, for stopping by and reading my poem, and your encouraging words, too :)

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/8/2015 8:47:00 PM

Wonderfully done with a powerful imagery that offers an even more powerful lesson, Laura. All the best for the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Laura Leiser
Date: 10/11/2015 5:14:00 PM

Thank you very much for your kind comments on my poem, Sandra! I appreciate it :)