Angel

Angel "I call him angel although not his name he sat down besides me one crisp fall day said to me " why do you cry" i turned to look at with tears in my eyes i said" he hits me i don,t know why" he looked at me said " there is a better way " he dried my eyes and carried me away took me to safe place where he gave me courage, hope and faith fed me a grilled cheese sandwich made straight from heaven . three months later he said " goodbye" leaving me with courage, hope,and renewed faith in god. until the day we meet again i say to him " your my and my friend". by bonnie morawa inspired by sean lugo

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John. M Diketane

Date: 3/28/2011 9:52:00 AM

The purity and simplicity of ur poem is inspiring...

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 3/28/2011 4:33:00 AM

I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup Bonnie. Please keep writing and sharing your poetry. Enter and enjoy some of the contests and I wish you the best in them. Love, Carol

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 3/27/2011 6:05:00 PM

Nice narrative expressions on angel, bonnie

A B

Date: 3/27/2011 5:58:00 PM

I enjoyed reading this simple but sweet poem of yours. It sounds like there is lots of history behindd it. I would recommend fixing the grammatical and spelling errors. I believe that when you were writing this poem you were trying to convey and express your feelings, and I believe that you came very close to doing that. I would recommend also talking about your emotions when he talked to you and when you responded. I think taht you would like using words like "pastiche" and "unconditional"