An Old Car

My family is an old car:
Dad is the oil of the motor that keeps the car in good condition 
Mom is the motor mounts that hold the motor in place
Paco, The Chihuahua is the seats in the car that the humans sit in to control the vehicle
Kiki, The cat is the hood of the car which is the door to the heart of the car that allows easy access to the motor
My Grandfather is the computer in the car which allows the car to run in a specific way and stores all the information you’ll ever need
My uncle Larry is the gas tank of the car which holds the fuel that runs the car
My Uncle Joe is the gas cap for the passage into the tank, into which the fuel flows down to enter the tank
Lulu, the pug is the wheels of the car, which may not always work as they should but they move the vehicle
Sweetheart, the pug is the very gauges of the car which tell you how fast you are going 
My cousin, Johnathan, is the steering wheel of the car, which makes the car go in a direction 
My Cousin Eric is the muffler which muffles the motor sounds 
My grandma Eastridge is the motor of the car which is the heart…Without it the car won’t run 
I am the framework of the car which holds us all together with my love.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 12/31/2014 11:22:00 AM
Hey Thomas, saw this featured on the home page. I like what you have done with this one. I once had a Chihuahua named Paco, but in my family car, he was the radiator because he would leak, especially after getting diabetes. Welcome to Poetry Soup.
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Date: 9/30/2016 11:37:00 AM
my uncle's dog lulu has diabetes but instead of "accidents" she got blindness
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Date: 9/30/2016 11:36:00 AM
Hey, the dog, paco died this year on August 15th
Date: 12/20/2014 4:16:00 PM
THOMAS, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you enjoy being part of the community. You'll find many friendly poets, who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I want to be the first to invite you on over, to the contest page. I OFFER MY CONTEST, "WINTER POEMS" in hopes it inspires you to write another poem. I look forward in following you and your poetry:) Enjoy the Christmas Holidays! From: your new poet friend@-> LINDA <-@
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Date: 12/17/2014 8:13:00 AM
I love this. What a wonderful metaphor you have used to picture a close-knit family held together and moved forward in love. The form, of course, is free verse. A possible enhancement of your poem would be to use more line breaks, or to use the concrete form, but I don't know how you would do the wheels. Great show!
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Date: 12/17/2014 2:20:00 PM
THANK YOU I APPRECIATE THE FEEDBACK
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