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An Old Ashtray

There's an old ashtray in the middle of the room, half filled with ashes and half filled with gloom. A reminder of things burning away, like a mind filled with memories, too many to stay. It's sitting next to an old photo book, frozen inside are the smiles that were took. Pictures of Summer's youth and naive trust, now sitting still and covered in dust. There's a chair left empty, the other one used, by an old man with a heart, lonely and bruised. There's a church down the street, with a graveyard out back. A stone with two names, together forever, Rita and Jack. Now Rita lies waiting for her life's mate, while Jack sits alone til they carve in his date. Written: 3/20/20 Contest: 2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 2 Sponsor: Mark Toney

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Date: 7/8/2022 9:19:00 AM
What a beauty this is, Wren. Just looking over past Marathon winners. One of my faves on that particular list.
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Wren Rushing
Date: 7/8/2022 2:14:00 PM
Andrea you have made my day! To even think that a poet of your caliber would even read my poem much less fav is an honor! Thank you and God bless you my dear poet!
Date: 6/18/2022 1:20:00 PM
Dear Wren, it is a thrill to return to read this exquisite poem once again and to offer you my heartiest congratulations for your excellent win in Mark's contest. Such potent poignancy. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Wren Rushing
Date: 6/18/2022 1:50:00 PM
Thank you Susan! It is always great to hear from you my dear friend!
Date: 6/17/2022 1:09:00 PM
Hi, Wren. What an intriguing title! In just 14 lines you take us from the old ashtray to the photo book, then to an empty chair, and finally to the church graveyard. The poem ends with a sobering reveal. Wow! Congratulations on your win on Mile 2 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon contest. Mile 3 has already started!
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Wren Rushing
Date: 6/18/2022 1:48:00 PM
Mark want to thank you for the kind words and for sponsoring the contest!
Date: 6/17/2022 12:36:00 PM
Beautiful and tragic poem Wren, I feel like I can picture him sitting there and feel the grief. Powerful and haunting words
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Wren Rushing
Date: 6/18/2022 1:47:00 PM
Thank you Had for your comments! Have a wonderful day!
Date: 4/28/2020 12:55:00 PM
Your rhyme flows so smoothly in this exceptional poem that drew me in from the first line. Wonderful work Wren! xxoo
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Wren Rushing
Date: 4/28/2020 5:39:00 PM
Thank you Connie! Hope you are doing well my friend!
Date: 4/9/2020 3:48:00 PM
Wren, you had me captivated with this tender, lonely, poignant gem right from the start. I love the intimate emotional imagery. There is such beauty in the sadness. Your last line is keenly impactful for a lasting impression. Superb! Warmest wishes always, dear poet and friend.. ~Susan
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Wren Rushing
Date: 4/9/2020 4:31:00 PM
Thank you Susan for your encouraging comments, as usual! I Hope you and yours are doing well during these trying times. Thank you again my dear friend!
Date: 3/26/2020 3:44:00 PM
This poem is a thing of beauty and has many of truth.
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Wren Rushing
Date: 3/26/2020 7:04:00 PM
Thank you Daisy! Have a wonderful evening!
Date: 3/24/2020 9:45:00 AM
This is a fine Last Will & Testament to days that ended, each name upon the other's lips. -Richard
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Wren Rushing
Date: 3/24/2020 1:57:00 PM
Thank you Quoth! Hope you're doing well!
Date: 3/23/2020 11:53:00 PM
“...til they carve in his date”. Whoa what a picture. Another excellent write. Your muse turned up I see.
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Wren Rushing
Date: 3/24/2020 1:56:00 PM
Thank you P.S.!
Date: 3/20/2020 10:07:00 PM
Excellent penning! Wonderful piece, a fave :), xomo
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Wren Rushing
Date: 3/21/2020 11:37:00 AM
Thank you Maureen for your kind words!

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