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An Innocent Childhood Memory

"Peacock feathers will grow"
If kept in a book ,nourished by pencil shavings;
I raised brow!
 
Probing to test~
Borrowed some from my friend's savings;
With zest.

Inclined
By false ravings--
Pined!!

"Peacock feathers will grow"
Borrowed some from my friend's savings;
Pined..!!

31-7-2020

Disclaimer: Written in memory of my school classmates.
Special dedication to my bestiee "Vishal Arun Raj" who 
appears in my poem:-)

First Place in the contest:-)
Note:Let's Minichu on an innocent Childhood Memory 
Poetry contest
Sponsored by Mohan Chutani.

New Rhyme scheme (MINICHU): Aba, cBc, dbD, ABD invented by C.Mohan.
Stanza 1: 6,12,3 (3 × 2,4,1)
Stanza 2: 4,8,2 ( 2 × 2,4,1)
Stanza 3: 2,4,1
Stanza 4: 6,8,1.

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/2/2020 9:24:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. Peacocks are so beautiful when they fan their feathers. A wonderful childhood memory. Enjoy your win and day..............

V. Deepa
Date: 9/2/2020 1:53:00 PM

Thankyou dear Paula mam for your lovely feedback.:-) Yes , Peacock is the national bird of India.So I love them and their feathers the most:-) Take care.Much love:-)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/31/2020 9:40:00 AM

Great poem on childhood innocence! Congratulations, Deepa!

V. Deepa
Date: 9/2/2020 1:51:00 PM

Thankyou dear Kim mam for your kind appreciation:-) Pleased to know you enjoyed. Take care.Much love..:-)

Mohan Chutani

Date: 8/31/2020 8:54:00 AM

So innocent, Deepa, believing in friends at that age. Perfect Minichu. Congrats. Mohan

V. Deepa
Date: 9/2/2020 1:46:00 PM

Thankyou dear Mohan Sir for the lovely words of appreciation.Your doing great by hosting contests.:-)You are an awesome sponsor and a wonderful writer. Keep inspiring us. Take care.Warm regards to you:-)

John Watt

Date: 8/20/2020 2:07:00 PM

Deepa, great to see one of your childhood memories committed to poetry. Save this like you did those peacock feathers, it will grow in value as you age! Best wishes, my friend ~ John

V. Deepa
Date: 8/28/2020 3:14:00 AM

Wow...I loved your positive ,motivational words dear John sir:-) Thankyou for always encouraging me.I will definitely do as you said. Will treasure my works .Thankyou.:-) Keep inspiring .Best wishes for you too.Take care.Warm regards sent to you:-)

Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 8/4/2020 11:55:00 AM

Deepa Well done! This is a beautiful poem! I think it is a winner!! Good luck!

V. Deepa
Date: 9/2/2020 1:49:00 PM

Glad to hear that you relate with my experience dear Krish sir. Yes, it is cute to cherish our innocent memories:-)

Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 8/31/2020 9:29:00 AM

Congrats on your win with this kissable fable!! I did that as a child too, because my sister told me that!! How innocent and beautiful!!

V. Deepa
Date: 8/5/2020 2:39:00 AM

Thankyou Krish sir for your encouragement and kind appreciations always.. Best wishes for you too:-) Have a wonderful day.Warm regards sent to you:-)