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An Empty Husk

We now dwell on different planes Yet still I hear your voice. Our parting, it was riven Neither made the choice. A dark shadow claimed you I raged and burned inside, Why were we forsaken Oceans, have I cried. Bereft, what am I to do Heartbroken, I'm alone. Where do I go from here, You were my rock, my home. Now I drift upon this cloud Of grief and endless pain. When you were taken from me, An empty husk remained. Entry for CONTEST NO 470,ANY FORM OR NONE,ANY THEME, UP TO A MAX OF 20 LINES Poetry Contest Sponsored by Brian Strand 25/7/18. Placed 7th.

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Date: 7/31/2018 3:51:00 PM
Lovely, Gary. Congrats on your win.
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Gary Smith
Date: 7/31/2018 3:58:00 PM
Thank you Line :)
Date: 7/28/2018 9:27:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. Raw pain here.
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Gary Smith
Date: 7/28/2018 10:37:00 AM
Thank you Susan :)
Date: 7/28/2018 4:18:00 AM
"you were my rock, my home," this conveys such an enormous feeling to the reader. Wow! Congratulations, you earned that win!
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Gary Smith
Date: 7/28/2018 7:09:00 AM
Thank you Caren :)
Date: 7/26/2018 7:38:00 AM
You convey all too well the sense of unbearable pain, touching on a fear shared by all who love another deeply. Congrats on your win.
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Gary Smith
Date: 7/26/2018 10:21:00 AM
Thank you L.J. :)
Date: 7/26/2018 5:44:00 AM
Whether true or fictional, Gary, the sorrow of deep pain was tangible. A well-deserved win!
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Gary Smith
Date: 7/26/2018 10:21:00 AM
Thank you Wendy :)
Date: 7/25/2018 10:30:00 PM
Broken love is a pain indescribable.. well written and a joy to read!
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Gary Smith
Date: 7/26/2018 10:21:00 AM
Thank you lyric man :)
Date: 7/25/2018 10:12:00 AM
Excellent writing Gary! Well done :)
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Gary Smith
Date: 7/25/2018 11:25:00 AM
Thank you Heidi :)

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