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Almost But Not Quite

Thrown a lifeline To pull us ashore Arrogance declines The ego scores Water near freezing Not quite yet ice Latent heat transforming Matter in a trice Eons of conditioning Buried in the subconscious Gurus grace uplifting Makes ascension instantaneous Mere recognition not freedom It simply plots trajectory To enter into a Gods kingdom We need to rewrite our story Dare we? 01-August-2020

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Susan Louise Gabriel

Date: 9/11/2020 8:50:00 AM

I like your poem very much! The way I interpret it is that some are lost in a frozen pond, thrown a lifeline, yet they refuse out of a ego. That we are given a choice - to "rewrite our story" or not. If that's not the meaning you intended - well it was the meaning I got. And I liked it! But I always did like somewhat ambiguous writing that allows me to put my own interpretations on it. Well done!

Unseeking Seeker
Date: 9/11/2020 8:36:00 PM

Thanks Susan! Happy you enjoyed :)