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Ain'T Many Days Till My Breakdown

Just sittin alone at my barstool yes, darling, I'm feelin real fine and I confess, I admire your dress yet I have to withhold the next line. Cause there ain't many days till my breakdown this darkness is comin on strong I'd love to reptile to your come hither smile but my downtime will soon be along. You truly are lovely, sweet darlin your red lips and golden hair crown are leadin me into temptation but the whirlpool will pull us both down. Cause there ain't many days till my breakdown this darkness is comin on strong I'd love to reptile to your come hither smile but my downtime will soon be along. So mosey on down to another to give you the life you desire leave me alone, to sort out my own if joined we'd both end in hellfire. Cause there ain't many days till my breakdown this darkness is comin on strong I'd love to reptile to your come hither smile but my downtime will soon be along. Entry - A Town called "Rotgut" This started with the refrain and was going to be a sad country song about depression, but then it met this contest and morphed, I'm not sure into what. Regardless, I hear steel or maybe slide guitar, in the forefront drowning out the lyrics for the good of all. DWR Iulius MMXIV

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Date: 8/12/2014 11:14:00 AM
Great write. Congrats. Nice going. Ralph
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D.W. Rodgers
Date: 8/12/2014 11:51:00 AM
Thanks Ralph
Date: 8/11/2014 3:05:00 PM
Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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D.W. Rodgers
Date: 8/11/2014 3:43:00 PM
Thanks Debbie
Date: 8/11/2014 4:05:00 AM
Much deserved win on this thotful great write Aberfoyle! big congrats !
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D.W. Rodgers
Date: 8/11/2014 7:25:00 AM
Thanks Dr. Sharma
Date: 8/10/2014 11:20:00 PM
Dave this would make a brilliant song, in fact I could hear Waylon Jennings singing it, loved it. Take Care..............Vera.......
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D.W. Rodgers
Date: 8/11/2014 7:24:00 AM
Thanks Vera, good to know you hear it too.
Date: 8/10/2014 11:06:00 PM
CongraTULATIONS FOR THIS FINE WIN IN THE CONTEST, aBERFOYLE
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Date: 8/10/2014 8:39:00 PM
Aberfoyle, Congratulations on this fine win.
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D.W. Rodgers
Date: 8/10/2014 8:48:00 PM
Thanks Mohan
Date: 8/10/2014 5:30:00 PM
Congrats on your much deserved win ;)
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D.W. Rodgers
Date: 8/10/2014 7:28:00 PM
Thanks Casarah
Date: 8/10/2014 3:02:00 PM
Congratulations on your placement in the contest...this was a fun one.
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D.W. Rodgers
Date: 8/10/2014 3:16:00 PM
Thanks, yes it was fun, where else can one use reptile as a verb?
Date: 8/10/2014 2:29:00 PM
Congrats on the fine win!!
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D.W. Rodgers
Date: 8/10/2014 2:59:00 PM
Thanks Robert
Date: 8/10/2014 10:31:00 AM
Interesting write. Congrates on the win.
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D.W. Rodgers
Date: 8/10/2014 10:58:00 AM
Thanks Carol.
Date: 8/10/2014 9:44:00 AM
dropping back with my congratulations:-) Hugs jan xx
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Date: 7/23/2014 6:00:00 PM
Would make a great country song, my friend! gl in the contest.. hugs.. Arlene
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D.W. Rodgers
Date: 7/23/2014 7:20:00 PM
Than Arlene, sometimes half the fun of playing with these thing is dropping a "g" now and then. cheers Dave
Date: 7/22/2014 10:06:00 AM
Good job!
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D.W. Rodgers
Date: 7/22/2014 4:17:00 PM
Thanks Susan
Date: 7/21/2014 4:41:00 PM
hey, you do lyrics? and play them on guitar? I sure wish I could write music because I have so many poems I would love to do to music!! I tried to learn guitar and after three years of practice, and 15 years later, I barely remember a thing I learned back then. the 40's is just too late in life to take it up. GREAT refrain this had. Good luck in the contest.
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D.W. Rodgers
Date: 7/22/2014 9:28:00 AM
Hi Andrea, Sorry I too am not musically talented, but keep hoping to find someone lyrically challenged and go from there.
Date: 7/20/2014 5:02:00 PM
ooh a deep dark write. good luck in the contest. Hugs jan xx
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D.W. Rodgers
Date: 7/20/2014 7:07:00 PM
Thanks Jan, like many we've been touched by depression and the demon drink, such are hurtin songs made of. Love your avatar but I'm partial to Odonata.

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