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Lawns luxuriant 
Drew sight of poor passersby
Barbed fence mocked when near!

Copyright Anulaxmi Nayak, 2017

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Date: 3/29/2018 3:43:00 PM
Indeed a lovely senryu, Anulaxmi. I agree with what Stephen said:) In life there are many things that tempt us, but we are unable to partake from! ~ Was wondering what had become of you...your absence has not gone unnoticed. Regards // paul
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Date: 6/26/2018 5:19:00 AM
Thank you Dear Paul Callus, I am glad you liked my write. Anu:)
Date: 1/19/2018 3:12:00 PM
I like the sentiment in this poem. I feel that line one counts 6 syllables not 5. I would lose the "The" and it works fine.
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Date: 6/26/2018 5:21:00 AM
Thank you Dear Stephen, yes i will correct the syllable count:) Anu:)