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Access Denied Lawns luxuriant Drew sight of poor passersby Barbed fence mocked when near! Copyright Anulaxmi Nayak, 2017

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Paul Callus

Date: 3/29/2018 3:43:00 PM

Indeed a lovely senryu, Anulaxmi. I agree with what Stephen said:) In life there are many things that tempt us, but we are unable to partake from! ~ Was wondering what had become of you...your absence has not gone unnoticed. Regards // paul

Anu Nayak
Date: 6/26/2018 5:19:00 AM

Thank you Dear Paul Callus, I am glad you liked my write. Anu:)

Stephen Wilson-Floyd

Date: 1/19/2018 3:12:00 PM

I like the sentiment in this poem. I feel that line one counts 6 syllables not 5. I would lose the "The" and it works fine.

Anu Nayak
Date: 6/26/2018 5:21:00 AM

Thank you Dear Stephen, yes i will correct the syllable count:) Anu:)