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TELL me, dear, everything which occupies you LAY each piece out, display your soul SELL me utterly all components, oldest to new SAY absolute etirety, without any toll FEEL my hands reaching musty content gently DRAWN out painlessly, your dark place REVEAL shame and sins as though incidentally TORN from humiliation without a trace BEGIN to trust your ribcage, competent holder Of HEART, outlandish desires wrapped WITHIN terror of memory allowed to smoulder DEPART from a prison, ribcage relaxed IMMERSED in latitude, stream jumping joyous FORGIVENESS view gifts expansion TRAVEVERSED in unison, a vocalised voyage DELIVERS cognition spun in tandem BLUEST of blue moons we nurture, accessible GIVING your mind renews our reward TRUEST thoughts I massage make it possible LIVING with wisdom, sharing one orb 13th November 2020 Written for Contest: In Rhymes Sublime Sponsor: Joseph May

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Date: 11/17/2020 2:50:00 PM
Sigrid what a totally and utterly absorbing read and poem So many or to many lines to mention individually But i especially loved Hands reaching musty content gently And Trust your ribcage competent holder As another of my favorites said Genius
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Date: 11/13/2020 10:24:00 AM
Simply sublime Sigrid, can feel the tension drawn out from within, where on earth did you pull this one from, rhyme vertical and parallel pure genius, you made it look effortless, but very complex at heart, it’s like you solved a Rubik’s cube with subtle gentle manipulation, 5 twists done, magic, sleight of hand, don’t care, didn’t notice I was absolutely absorbed, this must be a winner, cheers David,
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David Kavanagh
Date: 11/15/2020 12:14:00 AM
Wrote a silly poem to say thanks for all your comments, your name is in the title or is it? hope you don’t mind, cheers David
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Sigrid Ermine
Date: 11/14/2020 4:54:00 PM
You're a gem.!! Yes, it was easier to just slot all words at starts of lines. Loses a fair bit of hit in this pedantic form, but got away with it, I think.
Date: 11/13/2020 7:43:00 AM
Ah Sigrid who wouldn't want to share an orb with this beauty ? I loved your skillfully written words dear poet. Keep writing and sharing your gems.
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