Absorbed

TELL me, dear, everything which occupies you
LAY each piece out, display your soul
SELL me utterly all components, oldest to new
SAY absolute etirety, without any toll

FEEL my hands reaching musty content gently 
DRAWN out painlessly, your dark place
REVEAL shame and sins as though incidentally
TORN from humiliation without a trace

BEGIN to trust your ribcage, competent holder
Of HEART, outlandish desires wrapped 
WITHIN terror of memory allowed to smoulder
DEPART from a prison, ribcage relaxed

IMMERSED in latitude, stream jumping joyous
FORGIVENESS view gifts expansion
TRAVEVERSED in unison, a vocalised voyage 
DELIVERS cognition spun in tandem

BLUEST of blue moons we nurture, accessible
GIVING your mind renews our reward
TRUEST thoughts I massage make it possible 
LIVING with wisdom, sharing one orb



        13th November 2020 


        Written for Contest:  In Rhymes Sublime
        Sponsor:   Joseph May

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Christopher Flaherty

Date: 11/17/2020 2:50:00 PM

Sigrid what a totally and utterly absorbing read and poem So many or to many lines to mention individually But i especially loved Hands reaching musty content gently And Trust your ribcage competent holder As another of my favorites said Genius

David Kavanagh

Date: 11/13/2020 10:24:00 AM

Simply sublime Sigrid, can feel the tension drawn out from within, where on earth did you pull this one from, rhyme vertical and parallel pure genius, you made it look effortless, but very complex at heart, it’s like you solved a Rubik’s cube with subtle gentle manipulation, 5 twists done, magic, sleight of hand, don’t care, didn’t notice I was absolutely absorbed, this must be a winner, cheers David,

David Kavanagh
Date: 11/15/2020 12:14:00 AM

Wrote a silly poem to say thanks for all your comments, your name is in the title or is it? hope you don’t mind, cheers David

Sigrid Ermine
Date: 11/14/2020 4:54:00 PM

You're a gem.!! Yes, it was easier to just slot all words at starts of lines. Loses a fair bit of hit in this pedantic form, but got away with it, I think.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 11/13/2020 7:43:00 AM

Ah Sigrid who wouldn't want to share an orb with this beauty ? I loved your skillfully written words dear poet. Keep writing and sharing your gems.