Kim Van Breda Poet Couplet

Abandoned To Alcohol

burning arrows from my heart
bottles empty placating dart

lies concealed in hidden secret
diamonds write in veiled leaflet

hide from view all engraved words
bury burdens with blurred absurd

fill the sky with countless stars
appointed bars to hide the scars

float your bottles out to sea
as alcohol sets solitude free



© Kim van Breda—March 2014

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Brian Cooper March 13, 2014 at 11:30 PM Beautiful writing. "Solitude free" and alcohol I understand well. My best, Brian

Tim Ryerson March 11, 2014 at 5:39 AM Perfect rhyme throughout...Favorite line among many, 'float your bottles out to sea'... Kim Van Breda March 11, 2014 at 5:43 AM Thanks Tim-- appreciate the encouragement X

Russell Sivey March 9, 2014 at 10:43 PM This is a great symbolic and relative write my friend! I really enjoyed reading your alliteration that you have within your poem, for example, "bury burdens with blurred absurd" that is a very awesome line! Though i have to admit there really isn't a bad line here, you whole poem is tremendous! What a glorious piece, Great Work!! Kim Van Breda March 11, 2014 at 5:46 AM Thanks Russell for all these kind words of encouragement. I really appreciate the feedback. X