Abandoned Dreams

Knotted in the torsion of a tempest’s mood -
the barrage drains the sun and overwhelms the dusk
ire’s flash stabs the night.


Susan Ashley
April 6, 2019


~ Second Place ~
Contest: Favorite Poem From Last Week (March31 - April 6, 2019)
Contest: Lu Loo


~ Third Place ~
Contest: April 2019 Premier (3 Line Max)
Sponsor: Brian Strand
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Sambourne Avatar
May 7, 2022 at 9:09 AM
Greetings Susan, Another winner in so many ways. Your final line that (metaphorically) conveys anger as a dagger is truly inspired writing. Sincerest regards, Brian
Ashley Avatar
May 8, 2022 at 9:05 AM
Dear Brian, thank you for sharing in the dark mood and emotions of this poem. Your wonderful comments are uplifting, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Roper Avatar
April 18, 2019 at 10:08 PM
Congratulations on your wonderful win in Laura's contest. Have a great Easter. Hugs Eve ~`*
Ashley Avatar
April 19, 2019 at 8:15 PM
Thank you for your lovely comments and your gracious visit, Eve. It is such a pleasure to hear from you. Your kind congrats are most appreciated. Warmest wishes for a happy Easter.. ~Susan
Marcum Wong Avatar
April 17, 2019 at 6:40 PM
You have made the fierce power of Earth's elements roar Susan. Awesome! Congratulations on your second placement with this imaginative free verse! xxoo
Ashley Avatar
April 19, 2019 at 8:14 PM
It's always so wonderful to hear from you, Connie. Thank you for your heartwarming comments and kind congrats. You never fail to inspire me, my friend! Warmest wishes for a Happy Easter .. ~Susan
Michael Avatar
April 15, 2019 at 8:37 AM
Knotted,Drained Overwhelms...Ire stabs...Feel tired already...powerful words...powerful write...All the best Susan...
Ashley Avatar
April 15, 2019 at 5:31 PM
Yes, you don’t need much bc you’re so naturally sweet already :))
Michael Avatar
April 15, 2019 at 5:08 PM
Just a teaspoon of sugar...and I'm good to go...
Ashley Avatar
April 15, 2019 at 4:20 PM
I know, it’s enough to wear you out, isn’t it? Thank you for your wonderful comments and gracious visit, mon ami. You bring smiles always. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Haight Avatar
April 11, 2019 at 8:47 AM
What a vision...earthly as well as metaphorically...you paint with your well-chosen words, Susan. Very powerful. Congratulations on your podium win. Hugs, Sandra
Ashley Avatar
April 12, 2019 at 3:40 PM
Thank you, Sandra, for your precious comments and kind congrats. I truly appreciate your thoughts on seeing both sides of my poem. Warmest wishes always, my friend.. ~Susan
Krutsinger Avatar
April 10, 2019 at 11:11 PM
Congratulations my friend! You can "do something in 3 lines and/or 3 words that most cannot." Bravo my friend!
Ashley Avatar
April 11, 2019 at 8:31 AM
It's always so wonderful to hear from you, Caren. Thank you for your heartwarming comments and kind congrats. You never fail to bring me smiles, my friend! Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
B. Avatar
April 10, 2019 at 5:08 AM
A belated congratulations on your win, dear Susan!! An Exquisite free verse.. Penned so beautifully.. Your gifted talent continues to shine, my friend.. Have a blessed dsy!
Ashley Avatar
April 10, 2019 at 7:33 PM
I am uplifted by the loveliness of your generous comments and by your gracious visit, my dear Robertina. Your kind congrats warms my heart and is most appreciated. Warmest wishes to you always, my inspiring friend.. ~Susan
Pan Avatar
April 10, 2019 at 12:21 AM
a Profound expression of the fierce imagery Congratulations on your win
Ashley Avatar
April 10, 2019 at 7:31 PM
Your awesome comments are a pleasure to receive, Xuefeng. Thank you for your heartwarming words and for your kind congrats. Your gracious visit is most appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Roper Avatar
April 9, 2019 at 2:31 PM
Susan , congratulations on this very well done free verse.
Ashley Avatar
April 9, 2019 at 3:52 PM
Thank you for your wonderful comments and your gracious visit, Eve. It is such a pleasure to hear from you. Your kind congrats are most appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Warrior Avatar
April 9, 2019 at 8:32 AM
Hey sissy!...great stuff as per usual...congrats on the win my sibaling...happy endings...^**^ bro bro...{*J*}
Ashley Avatar
April 9, 2019 at 3:54 PM
Hey bro bro, it's always so wonderful to hear from you. Thank you for your awesome comments and kindhearted congrats. You never fail to bring me smiles, my sibaling! Warmest wishes and happy endings all around.. Your sane sissy, Illum <3
Duet Avatar
April 9, 2019 at 12:04 AM
This is really a wonderful poem, Susan. Congrats on your placement in the contest. :D
Ashley Avatar
April 9, 2019 at 3:50 PM
Thank you for your uplifting comments and your gracious visit, Carole. It is such a pleasure to hear from you. Your kind congrats are most appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Krampe Avatar
April 8, 2019 at 6:56 PM
Congrats on your win, Susan
Ashley Avatar
April 9, 2019 at 3:49 PM
Thank you for your kind congrats, Agnes.. and many congrats to you for your recently published poems. Your work is wondrous! Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Wolf Avatar
April 8, 2019 at 4:59 PM
Welcome back! … with such a vivid, winning three-line entry. The light emanating from your poem eclipses that of the mighty sun! :) gw
Ashley Avatar
April 9, 2019 at 3:47 PM
It's good to be back and I appreciate your warm welcome, my dear friend, Gershon. Thank you for your shining comments, the light emanating from your kind words fills me with sunny delight.. (that is.. golden light and happiness.. not the OJ.. lol!) Warmest wishes my wonderful friend.. ~Susan
Sergi Avatar
April 8, 2019 at 3:51 PM
You epitomized an overwhelming mood in just 3 lines. Congratulations! I PREDICT A IN!
Ashley Avatar
April 9, 2019 at 3:43 PM
Your uplifting and encouraging comments are such a delight to receive, Ralph. Thank you for your kindness and for your wonderful prediction. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Sergi Avatar
April 8, 2019 at 3:52 PM
I PREDICT A WIN!
Onclaud Avatar
April 8, 2019 at 3:15 PM
ohh, from vivid to stark images, this piece rouses the senses, susan... remarkable!..huggs
Ashley Avatar
April 9, 2019 at 3:41 PM
Your lovely comments are such a delight to receive, Nette. Thank you for shining your light of kindness on my poetry page. Warmest wishes, my inspiring friend.. ~Susan
Dietrich Avatar
April 7, 2019 at 3:08 PM
wow, very elegant words. I bet this will make the winners' list!!
Ashley Avatar
April 7, 2019 at 3:40 PM
Let’s hope the judge agrees with you, Andrea :)) Thank you for your uplifting comments and the pleasure of your visit. Warmest wishes always, my friend.. ~Susan
Daniel Avatar
April 7, 2019 at 10:31 AM
Poetry at its best, Susan:)
Ashley Avatar
April 7, 2019 at 3:05 PM
Thank you for your uplifting comments and your gracious visit , Jo. It is such a pleasure to hear from you. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Lindley Avatar
April 7, 2019 at 7:45 AM
True poetry my dear friend. I am so very and most delightfully pleased to see you have returned. So much power and depths in such few verses. A fav... God bless..
Ashley Avatar
April 7, 2019 at 7:54 PM
My dear friend, your shining comments and warm sentiments are so encouraging and most appreciated. Thank you for your fav and for sharing your precious thoughts with me, Robert. Your friendship is a blessing. I hope all is well with you and yours.. Warmest wishes always my wonderful friend.. ~Susan
Callus Avatar
April 7, 2019 at 3:01 AM
Three lines of poetic beauty, Susan! I can vividly bring to mind this striking image which you project, and relish its metaphorical content. ~ Warm regards, my friend; being looking out for you:) // paul
Ashley Avatar
October 9, 2023 at 6:14 PM
Oh my dear friend, your subtle hint was definitely lost on me! Lol! I always did wonder though, why you worded your first phrase like that.. maybe that’s why this poem immediately came to mind when you suggested using the tristich form on my poem Rain. This light bulb moment was several years in the making hahaha! Thank you my dear friend for affirming the poetry form change and for your generous and genuine kindness. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan :)
Callus Avatar
October 8, 2023 at 12:10 PM
Yes, my friend; I agree with the choice of form:) My (above) first phrase had been a subtle hint :) I admire your resilience and will to reach perfection! Warm regards & Hugs // paul
Ashley Avatar
April 7, 2019 at 7:33 PM
My dear friend, I relish your vibrant comments, they warm my heart. Thank you for sharing your wonderful thoughts with me, Paul. 2019 has been a pretty challenging year so far, hopefully I'll have more time here at PS soon. I've missed your poetry and our interactions, my inspiring friend. I hope all is well with you and yours. Warmest wishes and hugs always.. ~Susan
Pigeon Tart Avatar
April 6, 2019 at 10:12 PM
Powerful pen! That first line especially visceral. Good luckin the contest Lovely! xomo
Ashley Avatar
April 7, 2019 at 7:27 PM
Thank you, Mo, your wonderful comments uplift me. I'm so happy you felt my poem. Warmest wishes my lovely friend.. ~Susan <3
Cunningham Avatar
April 6, 2019 at 9:55 AM
Sometimes barriers' stop us from achieving our dreams, a lot said in three lines Susan. Nice to see you back on soup, hope things are ok. Tom
Ashley Avatar
April 6, 2019 at 10:56 AM
Thank you, Tom for being the first to leave such a thoughtful comment, there’s a lot of truth there. Thank you for your kind sentiments, as well, things are getting back to normal. My family and myself were sick with the flu during the month of March and my 92 year old Dad was hospitalized for 3 weeks due to flu complications. He’s home now, back to his usual spunky self - thank God! I hope all is well with you, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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