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A Trifle Overdone !!

Around the age of six i received from my maternal grandpa
a very special present , he had styled a home made kite
Thick brown paper for the body , newspaper for the tail
couldn't get this kite to fly, tried with all my might

One day i heard my father loudly yelling
in reference to this kite
 He had found it in a paddock
where I'd left it overnight

So the down the hill I ran 
to retrieve this special kite
My father, reins of horse in one hand stock whip in the other
punishment for the crime, stock whip round the backside, most painfully it did bite

For a minor misdemeanour the punishment a trifle overdone
for my lack of care of grandpas special kite
Much shedding of tears from the bruising pain
I endured on that fateful night
Copyright © | Year Posted 2026

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Winter Avatar
April 4, 2026 at 8:19 PM
The narrative style is really good. I don't think that a 6 year old deserved that cruel punishment. Best, Anne
bard Avatar
April 4, 2026 at 9:21 PM
That should read Thank you Anne
bard Avatar
April 4, 2026 at 9:20 PM
Good day Anne for your compassionate words and your feedback on my writing style Blessings Douglas
Rodrigues Avatar
April 4, 2026 at 12:49 AM
Great storytelling!
bard Avatar
April 4, 2026 at 1:47 AM
Thank you Kim Blessings Douglas xx
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