A Tree

Once, a leaf asked another.. ''let's be friends, '' other saw how happy they were, how strong they were together, so more flew.. from the ground and onto a big brown trunk, years and years came by, working together made them better, how beautiful they became! so many leaves I see, with a peace of wood, They formed an amazing plant called a tree.

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John Ginesi

Date: 6/3/2013 4:34:00 AM

Hi Aisha, this is a very original concept poem, using nature as a theme, I saw your name on the Souper's Wall so I looked your poetry up and was surprised in what I saw, please feel free to read my poems anytime. John

Gabe Shelly

Date: 5/24/2013 7:53:00 AM

Good idea, I like it. But the story needs more description... more elaboration... it's too short for the kind of story your trying to tell. Also, some of it doesn't make sense-- leaves flying from the ground to make a tree. If that were so, doesn't that mean the tree is already dead. You got talent-- I can see it-- but you need direction. Keep working.

Gabe Shelly

Date: 5/24/2013 7:50:00 AM

Read my poem "The Bike Trail" that might help you.

Caleah Buil

Date: 5/16/2013 5:30:00 PM

I loved this! I liked how you described it. Really cute and "growing" poem. ;)

Gabe Shelly
Date: 5/24/2013 7:52:00 AM

Sorry, I sent my message to the wrong person. Please forgive me.

Gabe Shelly
Date: 5/24/2013 7:47:00 AM