A Swimmer

thunder and lightning
as rain lashes the ocean - -
a swimmer turns back

for Heather’s Ocean-ku contest

naturehaiku

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Joe Maverick

July 28, 2013 at 1:16 PM

Well described and worded write Jack, and well done on the win..'

Audrey Haick

June 9, 2013 at 9:54 PM

I missed this, Jack...frightening! Congratulations on a well deserved win! x Annalise

Sheri Fresonke Harper

May 29, 2013 at 7:05 PM

This is like Florida, lol, so scary, enjoyed it, Jack!

Kathryn Collins

May 5, 2013 at 7:33 AM

So vivid. and scary.

Tahera Mannan

April 25, 2013 at 10:48 PM

Many congrats for this awesome ku and win.

Poet Destroyer A

April 24, 2013 at 8:02 PM

Jack, a nice winning Ku' poem... Congratulations in Heather's lovely haiku contest. xox~ Linda

Olusegun Arowolo

April 24, 2013 at 9:09 AM

Congrats on your wonderful win,Jack...Nice going...

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

April 24, 2013 at 5:21 AM

many congratulations Jack xx

Phyllis Babcock

April 23, 2013 at 4:43 PM

Congrats on your win . love phyl

Donna Jones

April 23, 2013 at 1:06 PM

This is so different... congratulations

Black Eyed Susan

April 21, 2013 at 1:46 PM

I hope he/she makes it back! yikes! If I were them I'd be seriously worried! I think you captured the danger here quite well... best wishes in the contest!

Andrea Dietrich

April 12, 2013 at 7:21 PM

another outstanding one, gosh, you are amazing today, my friend.

Harry Horsman

April 12, 2013 at 3:27 PM

interesting and a delight to read...

Russell Sivey

April 11, 2013 at 5:11 PM

I would turn back too if there was lightning out in the ocean, even if the salt keeps the electric current down from a lightning strike! This is a tremendous Haiku my friend, I thoroughly enjoyed reading it this evening! What a brilliant poem, Great Work!!