Laura Leiser Poet Triolet

A Summer High

Within these endless summer waves
    your liquid magic makes me high
         while through your tunnels I do ride
              you course around me as I glide
                   and thrill my being, while I crave
                        more of your magic, liquid high. 
                        
            










Written on 5/24/2015

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Highwave Brian May 29, 2015 at 7:24 PM So interesting and clever use of words; I like it!

Sneha Rv May 25, 2015 at 1:37 AM This is very lovely!! All the best in the contest!! P.S - Isn't the rhyme scheme supposed to be different? Just noticed! :D :D Laura Leiser May 25, 2015 at 8:09 AM Thanks, Sneha, for catching my mistake! I think I made the right correction. :)

Skat A May 24, 2015 at 4:41 PM I will enjoy this high.. Forever **SKAT** Laura Leiser May 24, 2015 at 5:41 PM Thanks, Skat! Enjoy:)

Anna Hopper May 24, 2015 at 3:32 PM Interesting... "Liquid magic". Could mean so many things. With that aside lol, EXCELLENT write! I love this style of poetry and you definitely made it look good! I am very interested in attempting a triolet! Laura Leiser May 24, 2015 at 3:42 PM It's not a drug high, as some would think, in this instance. My write is based on a visual of a surfer in a wave from Andrea's latest poetry contest :)

Jan Allison May 24, 2015 at 3:23 PM a lovely triolet Laura - good luck in the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx 7 xx Jan Allison May 24, 2015 at 3:40 PM I've yet to even look at the contest Laura:-) Hugs jan xx Laura Leiser May 24, 2015 at 3:39 PM Thanks, Jan. My first attempt at a triolet AND iambic pentameter! Hope I got it right :)