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A Sticking Plaster Cannot Heal a Broken Heart

all love died with you
when your coffin was interred
my heart built a wall

Senryu on sadness
Sponsored by Laura Loo
checked with how many syllables

09-01-17

deathheartbrokeni miss yousenryu

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Paul Callus

September 4, 2017 at 1:27 PM

I liked it, and so did Laura! Pleased to return with congratulations! Hugs // paul

Jan Allison

September 4, 2017 at 4:09 PM

Thanks Paul it makes a change from my humourous style:-) hugs Jan xx

Subimal Sinha-Roy

September 3, 2017 at 11:04 PM

Congratulations on your win, Jan.

Jan Allison

September 4, 2017 at 3:23 AM

Thanks so much:-) hugs Jan xx

Roy Pett

September 3, 2017 at 5:15 PM

Great Senryu and brilliant title, congratulations on your well deserved win Jan. :))

Jan Allison

September 3, 2017 at 5:17 PM

Thanks so much Roy:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May

September 3, 2017 at 3:32 PM

Congrats on your win Jan

Jan Allison

September 3, 2017 at 3:39 PM

Thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

September 3, 2017 at 1:20 PM

Excellent write, dear Jan <3

Jan Allison

September 3, 2017 at 3:38 PM

Thanks Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Heidi Sands

September 3, 2017 at 11:42 AM

Congratulations for your win Jan :)

Jan Allison

September 3, 2017 at 11:45 AM

thanks Heidi:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

September 3, 2017 at 11:36 AM

- Returning with a congratulations on your great first place in the contest, Jan - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison

September 3, 2017 at 11:41 AM

thanks so much Anne Lise:-) hugs jan xx

Mike Gentile

September 3, 2017 at 11:27 AM

Congrats on your win, xxoo

Jan Allison

September 3, 2017 at 11:29 AM

Cheers Mike:-) A somewhat melancholy poem for me but i did enjoy the challenge:-) hugs jan xx

Gary Smith

September 3, 2017 at 10:19 AM

Excellent Jan, congrats :)

Jan Allison

September 3, 2017 at 10:21 AM

Many thanks Gary:-) hugs jan xx

John Michaels

September 3, 2017 at 9:10 AM

Powerful stuff, Jan! Haiku and Senyru are my main "go-to" forms, but missed my chance with this one. Congratulations on your First Place win! Regards, John.

Jan Allison

September 3, 2017 at 10:22 AM

Thanks John, I never know if I have written a proper haiku and was delighted LuLoo liked this sad senryu:-) hugs jan xx

Dale Gregory Cozart

September 3, 2017 at 8:57 AM

Congrats on you win, Jan!

Jan Allison

September 3, 2017 at 10:23 AM

Cheers Dale:-) hugs jan xx

James Inman

September 3, 2017 at 7:48 AM

Toying with my emotions today. Now I am sad Jan.

Jan Allison

September 3, 2017 at 10:24 AM

I am happy i got a win... but it is a sad poem indeed James:-( hugs jan xx

Joanna Daniel

September 2, 2017 at 8:26 AM

This is extremely sad, Jan, I agree with Victor:)

Jan Allison

September 2, 2017 at 3:24 PM

Thanks Jo:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

September 2, 2017 at 6:17 AM

You captured sadness and heartache in just three lines, Jan. Well done! Hugs // paul

Jan Allison

September 2, 2017 at 7:34 AM

Thanks Paul I hope LuLoo likes it:-) hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

September 1, 2017 at 3:44 PM

This is excellent Jan! Your talent has really blossomed. I am so happy you found your voice through poetry! : )

Jan Allison

September 1, 2017 at 3:47 PM

aww thank you so much Connie I am absolutely amazed at how I have embraced writing as i was not a poetry fan at school.:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

September 1, 2017 at 1:19 PM

- A deep sadness, Jan - Great written - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison

September 1, 2017 at 1:38 PM

Thanks Anne Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Terry Shuff

September 1, 2017 at 5:39 AM

Thank you for your kind comments about the whale. Your poem, I've been there.

Jan Allison

September 1, 2017 at 6:18 AM

I think many people can relate to the poem Terry, I'm sorry you have been there:-( hugs jan xx

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

August 31, 2017 at 9:10 PM

Potent perfect pen! :) xomo!

Jan Allison

September 1, 2017 at 3:09 AM

Thanks Mo:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May

August 31, 2017 at 7:27 PM

So sad, as we do this to try to cope with our grief...best wishes

Jan Allison

August 31, 2017 at 7:32 PM

I agree Joseph, such heartbreak is difficult to deal with:-( hugs jan xx

Russell Sivey

August 31, 2017 at 6:52 PM

I liked this Jan. Russell is doing better, but his therapy today was rough on him. He can barely sit up and they have him doing leg exercises! He has to be doing better soon as he is going to a nursing home in the near future to have rehab...though it will be a slow rehab I hope. Poor Russell cried today he was in such pain. And the food here is awful, we both had their whatever sandwiches, and they were awful. Will have to bring some homemade food for him tomorrow. Oh, Russell wanted to write..

Jan Allison

August 31, 2017 at 7:01 PM

Thanks Emma and Russell. I am sorry to hear Russell is still in such pain its a shame they can't deal with that but it is wonderful to know he is making progress and will be in rehab soon and hopefully the food will be better!:-) my best wishes to you both. I know from having my hubby in surgery in 2013 that you too need support Emma - the patient gets the care from the staff but the relatives have such stress too. :-) hugs Jan xx

Russell Sivey

August 31, 2017 at 6:54 PM

He said, "Jan your words strike a chord in me. I have had feelings like this before when my grandmother died, we were very close. I closed off from the world for a little while, all except my wife. I can't separate myself from her, ever. But this poem reminded me of that experience. This is such a special poem, a very well thought out piece, great work."