A Spring To Summer Romance

he was not my type
but by the time it was spring
i wore that man's ring

once he wore me down
i flowered in the garden
of his sweet attentiveness
but began to droop
in the absence of his care. . . . 
July’s drought was hard to bear

that ring he gave me -
cheap like his lackluster love -
broke in mid-august

By Andrea Dietrich

(combination senryu and choka)
For Russell Sivey's 
Relationship Breakups Poetry Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Davis Avatar
February 17, 2014 at 4:21 PM
Andrea This is a very creative write. The comparison of the flowers death and love intertwines nicely. Well done Thanks for the great comment on my Two Friends And A Puppy poem
A   Avatar
October 26, 2011 at 6:34 PM
Hi.. Andrea.. stopping by to say good night... I just want u to know is that.. u rock....and no I'm no where near depression.. but it has tainted me a bit... Ha ha... Take care... P.d
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October 14, 2011 at 8:05 PM
as u must know by now..Constance has left PS..deleted all her poetry and blogs and will judge her contest soon as it is filled up.. but that is it... she is devastated by all the arrows slung at her and insists she won't return.. Carol Brown considering too.. and Carrie from her last blog ... well right now I have no time Andrea butm I might take a break..not sure.. I like PS..and when it is good it is very good.. hope all is restored with administratiion too..luv.. just wanted u to know..
Brown Avatar
October 13, 2011 at 10:18 AM
Congratulations on your 1st Place win Andrea. Sorry to be late to comment. Love, Carol
Benson Avatar
October 12, 2011 at 11:35 AM
Woosh! Great write Andrea, and thanks for reading my Silent Times. Good luck in the contest. Ingibo
A   Avatar
October 9, 2011 at 12:42 AM
ANDREA, CONGRATULATIONS ;-) ~ IN Russell Sivey, CONTEST.. GREAT ENTRY,..ALWAYS,..P.D.
Ramage Avatar
October 8, 2011 at 11:24 PM
Ditch him, he wasn't worth it! Great write, congrats on your win. Lee
Freeman Avatar
October 8, 2011 at 9:55 PM
Great to see you in the one spot with this beauty Andrea. Agape, Moses
Guzzi Avatar
October 8, 2011 at 8:31 PM
excellent effort...light & love
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October 8, 2011 at 7:24 PM
congrats on another 1st place andrea! I really like this one, well thought out combination of senryu and choka
Lucas Mcclure Avatar
October 8, 2011 at 2:14 PM
Congratulations on your stellar win!!!!===Lori
Long Avatar
October 8, 2011 at 2:01 PM
very nice.. I can picture your every word.. congrats on your win. free spirit
Neels Avatar
October 8, 2011 at 1:56 PM
Gosh, I missed this one earlier on Andrea, congratulations on your first place win ;-) love your approach to the contest!! Love Wilma
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October 8, 2011 at 10:53 AM
Like the way you did this one Andrea in comparing love with a flower who dies without love and care. Outstanding. love phyl
Sweetheart Avatar
October 7, 2011 at 4:11 PM
cool composition of a broken relationship with nice rhyme to enhance the flow Andrea.. good luck in Russell's contest luv..
Susan Avatar
October 6, 2011 at 8:44 PM
awesome poem! such great use of symbolism! i love love love this! you will kick butt w/this poem!
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October 6, 2011 at 7:27 PM
Very moving poetry delivered with style and profound thoughts. You are such a wonderful writer! Thank you for sharing your talents!
Austin Avatar
October 6, 2011 at 4:52 PM
Bet that there ring turned her finger blue. No loss. You said it at the beginning - "he was not my type." Luck in the contest. Love, daver
Song Avatar
October 6, 2011 at 4:03 PM
Now, do tell us all, dear Andrea...what IS a JULY DROUGHT EXACTLY? ha ha.....I wrote the bat poem for her blog bc she had my favorite haiku on there for the longest time about a fishy that jumped into the toilet. She changed the pic to a bat from a fruit tree in her own back yard. My new haiku is to go with her new blog photo...since u asked...lol. ~~~~Hit the top with this winning write. I can't believe all the amazing entries...it's too personal for me to write about love. Pain....pain....ugh.
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October 6, 2011 at 3:32 PM
yes very nice combination of forms to tell the broken relationship.Enjoyed.Best wishes ANDREA...
Poet Avatar
October 6, 2011 at 3:32 PM
yes very nice combination of forms to tell the broken relationship.Enjoyed.Best wishes ANDREA...
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October 6, 2011 at 3:15 PM
A great combo of forms, Andrea, and all too often the enchantment of love fades as years pass. Best wishes in Russell's contest! BTW, Deb has asked some of us to "lengthen" our entries for her contest. Mine was shorter when originally posted. Saw your note on Jack's entry about the Banshee. Love, Carolyn
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October 6, 2011 at 3:08 PM
oh shucks but this sure can be very true-- I like the defiant tone you put in your last senryu...and I hope this does well, sweetie :) hugs to you-- yup my connection's funky again....
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October 6, 2011 at 1:58 PM
Clever use of these two forms, my friend. I love the description of his ring being lacklustre, like his love - very powerful
Smith Avatar
October 6, 2011 at 12:33 PM
Love the poem; memories. You picture it perfectly; so adroitly. All those cheap rings I handed out maybe didn't mean much, but we had fun. In early romance we learn about relationships, then go on and marry the wrong person.
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