A Spiracle Leap

A SPIRACLE LEAP The spiral staircase made her high heels sing. Round and round, Suzette tapped a snazzy dance. Her smile sparkling, ears dangling with butterfly wings. Curves on fire, tights and a bodysuit, tighten his trance. Her sugar cane a la morse code, a hypnotic prop. Brady’s heart making love, promising everything. The wings of her bedpost become a silk backdrop. Occasioned honeymoon, death claimed her wedding ring. From here the City churches pierced the mist, shrouding every living part inside his tortured chest, clamoring to raise the dead, in rage, with tentacled fist. Like a hammer to a crucifix’ nail, he pounds his breast. The creak of her satin-lined coffin, pure and white, speaks to his quietus soul — her shut eyes aware. Suzette spoke in a spiracle leap, from the box, sans sight. He closed it, and, now smiling, crossed the square.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 6/20/2018 11:32:00 PM
Congratulations Kim Tom
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/21/2018 6:32:00 AM
Thank you, Tom! :)
Date: 5/10/2018 9:07:00 AM
I agree, great imagery and concept, Kim. I had to read it a few times to take it all in, well done xxoo
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/10/2018 9:18:00 AM
Thanks, Mike!
Date: 5/9/2018 1:42:00 PM
Your verbs are so appealing, and move the reader so fast, she has to re-read it. I too want to know why he smiled.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/9/2018 7:33:00 PM
Thanks, Caren. Line one, nine and sixteen were given. The poem is written around it. The smile, as I wrote it, came from the hope of the angel in the coffin, that he would reunite one day with his love.
Date: 5/9/2018 1:08:00 PM
I like the imagery and concept too...Why did he smile?...All the best Kim
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/9/2018 1:28:00 PM
I would say out of hope. Her spirit spoke to him :)
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