A Sad One Liner

the after effects of suicide... fate worse than death if left behind

10/11/2016

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Teddy Kimathi

Date: 10/14/2016 8:29:00 AM

Congrats Mark, for your well, deserved top placement in the contest!! ;-)

Mark Paul Van Der Merwe
Date: 10/14/2016 10:10:00 AM

Thank you Teddy - i really wasnt expecting the win but hey I will take it - lol Regards, Mark

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/13/2016 6:28:00 PM

Hi Mark Paul, These sad words ring true. In a few words this one liner spoke loud and clear. My heart goes out to the one "gone" and the ones left behind. Congratulations on your 1st place win:-) Alexis

Mark Paul Van Der Merwe
Date: 10/13/2016 11:40:00 PM

Thank you Alexis - i appreciate you reading and taking the time to comment. All the best there. Regards, MArk

Beautiful Scars

Date: 10/13/2016 11:34:00 AM

Oh Mark.. I know this pain all too well...I always say that my pain now is worse than my sisters pain before she died. Us left behind are in such misery....I hope this is fiction but I have a feeling it's not..congrats on your placement :)-luloo

Mark Paul Van Der Merwe
Date: 10/13/2016 11:36:00 PM

Dear Luloo Thank you for reading. I have had a few close friends lost to this sad way but fortunately no family, the subject has always been close to heart though. I'm sorry about your sister, I lost 2 brothers 7 years apart, 1 was late last year, we were very close, I have a line that runs through my mind all the time - "The saddest moments I have never dealt with yet" - i will use it in one of my poems when i am ready. Thank you, Regards, Mark

Anna-Marie Docherty

Date: 10/12/2016 12:45:00 PM

So true those left there to pick up the pieces and grieve too... Very sad. Congratulations on your win!

Mark Paul Van Der Merwe
Date: 10/12/2016 11:53:00 PM

Thanks Anna-Marie - Unfortunately is very sad - a minds space can do strange things! Regards, Mark