Tim B Poet Ballad

A Sad Attempt

Wander and meet in wicked wind
They cut their teeth on broken nails
Walk across golden pond in sin
Trail of tears on glacial lake pales
In comparison to his frozen heart 

The heart of the damned chained forever
The heart of the damned pained forever

Pains me to think of them outstretched
Those arms of love, those arms
Brought me to believe far fetched
Dreams of love did some harm
Bleak shores broke on the edge

The heart of the damned chained forever
The heart of the damned stained forever

Surely you have heard his tale traveler
In your heart you knew it was true
Blue crystals of iced saline unravel
In a pool all that was left of Hue
His grave beside hers long overdue

The heart of the damned chained forever
The heart of the damned pained forever
The heart of the damned

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*This is a work in progress and is not the final version of this poem, I SUCK..... AGAIN!

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Summer Uchacz October 22, 2011 at 7:46 PM Amazing write! you have magnificent talent. Keep writing :) Tim B October 22, 2011 at 8:05 PM Thanks, have made a few adjustments to this poem and will still make a few more eventually when time is not as of the essence.

Nette Onclaud October 13, 2011 at 12:17 PM ohh, ohh... the searing feel of this is amazing, tim.. i have a different version being drafted ( in terms of structure)... so many variations, but this stands out .. spotlight! :) huggs!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart October 13, 2011 at 11:09 AM wow Tim this is so intense with feeling and emotion of the passion of the beloved.. amazing projection of pain and suffering .. will definitely want to read finished product luv..let me know when completed.. dynamic..

Charles Henderson October 12, 2011 at 7:15 PM Tim---A very nice poem here. Please check the form and the meter. I would say is free verse. Very nice free verse. Keep it up, but do a little research too. Lines one and two in second stanza are the form and meter for ballad 8/6/8/6 un st/un st/un st/un st Iamic tetrameter un st/un st/un st iambic trimeter Chas Tim B October 12, 2011 at 8:38 PM I kinda threw this one out there, I have never been comfortable writing with meter and especially not anything that resembles a song form. I know I should have researched a bit more, but hands on is the best way to learn, thanks for the info.

John Smith October 12, 2011 at 7:10 PM The Viet Nam war damned many American military hearts. This powerful, gut wrenching write tells it well.