Michael J. Falotico Poet Rhyme

A Ride Alone

The view on the drive has lost its meaning...
The tree's look the same but the air has no feeling...
What was once a yellow brick road is now dark and grey...
My mind see's things differently, even if bright sun is the day...
The pathway to fantasy is tainted and has faded far away...
The castle is empty and the princess has disappeared...
This ride was predicted and the loss was all too feared...
Little pieces of my heart now trail and dissolve on the ride...
The memory has faded but still some days, what I miss I can't hide...








Once again on a past relationship....

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Deb Radke December 22, 2010 at 8:07 AM Oh Michael. A poignant write. I love the lines "The castle is empty..." and "This ride was predicted..." Yes. Even when we can see it coming, we can't help but take the ride. Very good, my friend. I hope all is well. Love, Deb

Michael J. Falotico December 12, 2010 at 10:51 AM Glad and I guess sad that many can relate to this write... glad u enjoyed...

Elizabeth Bark December 7, 2010 at 5:31 PM hey...i need some advise....im have a realy bad case of writers block...i havent had any ideas for new ones...HELP!!! always and forever--lizzy b <3333

Katie Telling December 7, 2010 at 1:10 PM This is very nice, Michael. I can completely relate, you do an excellent job of showing how much things can change when a relationship ends. Great work :)

Carrie Richards December 5, 2010 at 5:53 PM This comes from the heart....and many others will also see and understand this familiar scene. Sad and heartwrenching. Well done, Michael !

M.I.A . December 5, 2010 at 4:54 PM I can definitely see what you're trying to convey. Awesome, enjoyed reading your soul today. thanks for stopping by :D

Sharon Ruebel December 5, 2010 at 12:46 PM Hello Michael. This is so well done. The meaning grabs me and the pain is so real. I feel this still As Always, Shar

Carolyn Devonshire December 5, 2010 at 9:38 AM Challenges in relationships can impact the way we look at things, Michael. I'm glad this is based on a "past relationship" and not a present state of mind. Many will relate to the feelings you describe. Very nice metaphoric value in this poem! Love, Carolyn

Wilma Neels December 5, 2010 at 8:33 AM You know what Michael, when we can think back on them without feeling hate it was worth the trials and focus on the love we had.. Great memories with a deep meaning.. I enjoy your introspective writes Mr. R - Love W

Linda-Marie Sweetheart December 5, 2010 at 8:24 AM WOW.. and this means what? is everything OK? sounds like the sandcastle had folded .. beautiful lines but am concerned... u will never be alone Michael.. Jersey Girl with luv..

Michael J. Falotico December 5, 2010 at 8:22 AM Just a passing memory that crosses my mind and travels at times.....MJF