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This is a true recounting of an event, in the aftermath of a family funeral I know both

witnesses, who were sitting in vehicle, it was on a return visit to cemetery after reception on day of funeral, so no one near car..' as I see it, it could only be the Holy Spirit..'  I just removed the word  'the' from this

write in the interest of quicker delivery.  Have added  'He' and today ( 26 10 2015)  by 'as in close' to keep the write in true perspective..'

Shimmering was the air nearby, I know a man who did such descry..' To point it out after a space.' before he could; things changed apace, Compressed..? this glistening..' the air more 'white'..? Then in a twisting flow, of a flood..? it did alight..! The appearance was liquid, filled with shining bright, 'Alive to forever' such an arresting sight.' It chose the hood upon to fall, like water on tin; its noise withal.' Displaced the metal, this liquid light, flying forward speed of sight..' His passenger was of many years, from testing times of strength and fears An atheist, he knows this well.. He gazed transfixed; to times shrink & swell..' He wondered did she see or know. but He could not turn from what was so..! A ripple began from the hood fore, ran to the edge. Then up into air till 'twas no more.' Still stunned,from out the corner of his eye, he saw his aunts face heard her low cry she said .'did something hit the car at all? yet no one was near, and he thought no earthly thing by did fall.. He wonders still did she see light as well, or only hear & if she did will she then tell.? Her years are 90 she was sitting bent low, it only fell when He intended to show.' He keeps his silence..' yet should he ask.? she is old and frail it would be a task To her son he spoke, he said 3 times I've asked she's vague, she thinks there was something, then says she's not sure..' It may be to much for her, let things stay this way..'

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Date: 5/22/2016 7:54:00 AM
Fascinating read Joe, congratulations on being featured...
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Joe Maverick
Date: 5/30/2016 5:46:00 PM
Hi there Charlie thank you for the good news, I have seen you commenting on others pages, thank you for the visit hope to see more of you..'
Date: 11/30/2015 4:37:00 AM
great piece of poetry Joe ole mate, to test the brain if not too late, faint memory of the scene
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Joe Maverick
Date: 12/31/2021 1:36:00 PM
Thanks mate.'
Date: 11/13/2015 10:45:00 AM
read it now to some older post
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Date: 10/5/2015 11:45:00 AM
Thanks for dropping by old friend. Love, daver
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Date: 9/21/2015 8:59:00 AM
Wow man that was one heavy piece of poetry. I like the elemental, mystical feel. Nice.
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Date: 9/20/2015 1:26:00 AM
glad you got to see a picture of the family house, Joe. It was actually more grey in my day and did not have that big bush in the front yard. Hope you are enjoying the weekend!
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Date: 9/18/2015 2:57:00 PM
Well was it something real or supernatural??Enjoyed reading your work.. Thanks for dropping by..I appreciate your kind review..Sara
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Date: 9/15/2015 10:50:00 AM
Amazing things can happen in this world. I'll not make light of any apparition. Fascinating, Joe. Love, daver
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Date: 9/14/2015 6:35:00 PM
hey, thanks for reading my spooky poem today, JOe!!
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Date: 9/12/2015 3:01:00 PM
You possess a very unique writing style, a challenging coupling of clarity and ambiguity that motivates the reader to internalize the spirit of the poem, I've always admired this in your poetry Joe. This poem, in my mind, tells how an atheist never loses sight of wonder, that they remain very close to the truth of the Grand Creator. I feel a strong sense of soul limbo in this poem soothed by the wonderful perception of "Alive to Forever..." J.A.B.
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Date: 9/10/2015 3:11:00 PM
wow, how cool. Have a great week, my friend. I'm playing catch up - will get round to Soup mail later...LOL
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Date: 9/9/2015 8:21:00 AM
An amazing story, grips from start to finish. Well told.
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Date: 9/6/2015 1:11:00 AM
I'm so compelled to read this amazing write and story of yours my very dear friend, Joe. I'm so glad that I've stopped by here this afternoon. I enjoyed it so much. Thanks a lot for sharing! Thanks a lot as well for your precious time reading one of my humble writes and also for your very encouraging comments. Hugs back at you! Have a great weekend! love lots, Leonora
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Date: 9/1/2015 3:58:00 PM
A stunning write here, you penned this well and beautiful... Thanks for shared........A.M.
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Date: 8/31/2015 6:25:00 PM
So interesting and kind of different one from you, Joe. Like reading Revelations!! For real!
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