A Response To My First Poem

Come Be My Friend

Softly
Gently
Let us be warm and friendly.

Curious
But cautious
Happiness is much too precious.

Marveling
Wondering 
What days ahead will bring.

Softly
Gently
Let us be warm and friendly.


13 November 2014



I Will Be Your Friend

Softly we have tread 
the road to Friendship Lane;
Gently we have stepped
to cause not undue pain.

Curious as a child
you saw the difference in lives,
cautious till the end
lest you bleed from careless knives.

Marveling of days
and now you’ve found a few,
kindred gentle spirits
respecting justice, like you.

Now you found in life
though cautious you have been,
there will always be
a time you’re pained within.

Then you wonder how,
so softly you may have tread
yet on hindsight find
that someone’s heart you’ve shred.

I will be your friend
but be not quick to bind
yourself and say it wouldn’t end;
Be open-hearted, wise and kind.

There are friends for each, that’s true,
keep close to your heart the ones
who bring out the best in you;
One true friend outshines even the sun.



30 September 2015
A Response to Your first Poem Contest
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Copyright © | Year Posted 2015


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Date: 9/14/2018 10:52:00 AM
Kim: "Keep close to your heart, those that bring out the best in you". I trust you found some folks on the soup that might fit that description. I read their responses to your work. Filled with appreciation and a desire to hear more. Please reply so we can know you are O.K. oldbuck
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Date: 10/2/2015 6:19:00 PM
Dear Kim This poem is much lighter a refreshing work compared to the last one, I've just read loved the warmth within this write, the feeling of friendship is just lovely, splended piece of poetic charm, enjoyed the read tonight, take care and have a wonderful weekend, I'll be back another time to read more, cheri
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Date: 10/2/2015 2:36:00 PM
Kim, your value of friendship shines throughout this outstanding write and win. Congrats
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Date: 10/2/2015 8:34:00 AM
The more we learn the wiser we become, at least some of us. Certainly you have learned, dear Kim, learned to the point to be able others to advise! Excellent! A7. Good luck!
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Date: 10/2/2015 5:26:00 AM
This response to your initial attempt is the result of life's experiences. You give advice with tact and clear mind, warning the heart to be cautious. The final stanza just about sums it all up! Congrats on this fine win ~ hugs // paul
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Date: 10/2/2015 1:00:00 AM
Kim, Congratulations on the response to your first poem ***SKAT
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Date: 10/1/2015 9:46:00 PM
I enjoyed your first poem and your brilliant response poem. Especially the wisdom in your last stanza! #7 Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 10/1/2015 4:19:00 PM
Interesting lines penned..Enjoyed reading today..Congrats on your win..Sara
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Date: 10/1/2015 3:45:00 PM
When a poem comes from the heart, there is no denying its beauty. Great job a 7 indeed
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Date: 10/1/2015 3:40:00 PM
Kim this is beautiful, I've experienced this with my children, and they come through it and it can be so painful for them at the time. As a parent it can be so tough, we know it will be OK, but, they have still have so much to learn.
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Date: 10/1/2015 3:40:00 PM
GREAT job, I especially loved the first one. Just because it was so succinct and I enjoy that kind of format. Hope this scored high! Congrats.
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Date: 10/1/2015 8:30:00 AM
Oops, I forgot the congratulations!
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Date: 10/1/2015 8:29:00 AM
This is perfect, I like the way you describe friendship, it shows what a good heart you have.
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Date: 10/1/2015 3:03:00 AM
Really well written Kim, And so touching hope you found all the friends you need!!!! Good Luck Kevin
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Date: 10/1/2015 2:52:00 AM
This is wonderfully expressed KIM. Your response to your first poem is excellence. Congratulations on your win..........A.M.
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Date: 10/1/2015 1:57:00 AM
Wonderful poem Kim n so is the win! Big congrats!
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Date: 9/30/2015 9:56:00 PM
Your response to your first poems is an excellent extension of the goodness in the first. Congrats on your fine win..
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Date: 9/30/2015 9:42:00 PM
Fantastic interpretation and response to your first write, and congrats to you, Kim!
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Date: 9/30/2015 9:26:00 PM
Hi Kim, I love the invitation extended by you in your first poem followed by the confirmation of friendship in your response. Such nice thoughts and words of wisdom. Congratulations on your win! Hugs, Sanda
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Date: 9/30/2015 8:55:00 PM
I love how your responded to your first poem Kim. Congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve
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Date: 9/30/2015 8:54:00 PM
Kim, I enjoyed both poems and their message. Can I be your friend? Congratulations on your win it was well deserved:-)Alexis
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Date: 9/30/2015 8:51:00 PM
Excellent win Kim!
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Date: 9/30/2015 4:45:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Kim - and yes lets have a big global party!!!! :-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/30/2015 4:35:00 PM
- "I Will Be Your Friend" ............. forever - A lovely poem - Good luck in the contest, Kim - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 9/30/2015 4:37:00 PM
......you won already ..... wooow ..... CONGRATULATIONS :)
Date: 9/30/2015 2:43:00 PM
This is beautiful Kim, thank you for sharing your warm heart with us. Friends bring out the best in us (at times) wishing you luck.... LINDA
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