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A Rattlesnake In Georgia

Haiku one of my first poems on soup
rattlesnake Georgia rattlesnake venomous dangerous foe hidden in garden
A Rattlesnake In Georgia Metamorph Revision To the herb garden meandered Some squash needed picking Gloved hands and a six inch long blade No thoughts of snake sticking Rockie our Rat Terrier pet Jumped 'pon retainer wall Then back down as fast as lightning The snake did forward crawl Putting some herbs in the basket. Out of corner of eye Something in a flash moved 'Twas a snake going by Looked like a rat snake mixed in straw "Twas a Copperhead then Sticking him with my blade so hard He crawled off, coiled just when I thought I had him conquered_ he Rattled, raised up, fangs showed Backing off out of reach, gave thought When he dropped, my blade goad He crawled off injured; Hope he died I didn't want him to strike At unprepared family member Enemy still dislike Inspired by: Debbie Guzzi Contest: Metamorph The form is similar to Quatrain but not exactly. It is a form used by Emily Dickinson in many of her poems. It is a type of Poulter's measure. It is 8,6,8,6 with the six rhyming. Verse is a stanza of a poem so these are stanzas or I can change it to Quatrain..

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Date: 5/1/2013 6:06:00 PM
Sara, Congratulations :-) In Debbie's "Metamorph" contest. always~ PD
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Date: 4/29/2013 6:36:00 AM
Congrats on your big win, Sarah....a rattlesnake bit my rat terrior on the nose once....then I blew it away with a shotgun..ha.
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Date: 4/27/2013 2:08:00 PM
Just catching up on the contest results Sara, see you got a No1 here, Congratulations and well done, an excellent morph you pulled off here. Take care, Richard
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Date: 4/26/2013 5:45:00 PM
Very nice. Liked the form. J.
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Date: 4/25/2013 11:58:00 PM
Big Congrats on your deserving grand win Sara... LOve and Hugs~A.O
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Date: 4/25/2013 6:51:00 PM
a well deserved win, Sara. big congrats to you.
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Date: 4/25/2013 6:45:00 PM
Congrats for your big win Sara, this is really a great story :D wishing you a lovely day there :D hug, Yanny
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Date: 4/25/2013 5:56:00 PM
Congratulations on your great win. This is a fabulous style verse. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 4/25/2013 4:09:00 PM
Way to go Sara, well deserved win.
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Date: 4/25/2013 2:18:00 PM
After all these years Sara I was so happy to give you first place, you work very hard at your writing and it shows with such wonderful results! Congrad's Light & Love
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Date: 4/25/2013 10:53:00 AM
Congratulations Sara for your No. 1 win....so proud of you, and its so well written. Love Terry xoxo Fave......it and a 7 >>>
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Date: 4/25/2013 10:30:00 AM
Congratulations Sara: What a heart stopping moment it is to confront Death in the form of a snake. To re-live such a moment takes courage..... Best, SuZ
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Date: 4/25/2013 10:07:00 AM
Many congratulations Sara luv , well done xx
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Date: 4/25/2013 9:08:00 AM
Congratulations to you Sara!!!! (We too, have had rattlesnakes on our property....twice our dog has had emergency treatment from bites!! I relate to your amazing transformed poem!! Great job, Sara.....a whole new poem made from a small haiku!! :)
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Date: 4/25/2013 8:22:00 AM
Big congrats on a great win Sara....
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Date: 4/11/2013 6:30:00 PM
WOW, love this Sara,I showed my 3 yr old g-daughter a 10 inch as we were out by basketball court, which was partnered with field. when I was preg. with my daughter, there was a snake in house behind washer, 4 ft long ? almost peed my pants. awesome write ;} it's a winner .
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Date: 4/11/2013 3:06:00 PM
wow, scary stuff, my friend - sure to be a winner
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Date: 4/10/2013 7:22:00 AM
Sara it looks great to me I'm assuming the first 3 lines which are centered was the old verse? Please label Old & New Light & Love
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Date: 4/10/2013 4:31:00 AM
Nice poem written about a snake, oh my, cant look at them on TV. Take care . Terry xo i gave you a 7 >>> for killing the snake.
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Date: 4/9/2013 9:04:00 PM
yikes... Sara, i hope he died... and you did well with the Metamorph, in deb's contest... always~ Linda
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Date: 4/9/2013 2:39:00 PM
It was good to learn more details of the story here, Sara. What form might this be that you morphed it into?Is it quatrain? I think so!
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Date: 4/9/2013 1:45:00 PM
Nicely done Sara...good luck in the contest....Donna
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Date: 4/9/2013 12:27:00 PM
This is a perfect entry into Debbi's contest my friend! A rattlesnake is nothing to mess around with, neither is a copperhead for that matter! At least you go the most of him, maybe he went off and died, I hate snakes...they are the devils tool, cursed by God! I'm glad you and your family were ultimately safe! What an awesome poem describing this event wonderfully! Such a suspenseful piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 4/9/2013 11:55:00 AM
Sara; I like the poem, but I don't like snakes, big or small. I am terrified of them. Every year I find at least one or two. I kill them right away. I just saw in the News - that A Rattle snake was found in a kids back pack. here in Texas - there's a lot of Rattle Snakes. Thanks for sharing... Lucilla
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Date: 4/9/2013 11:11:00 AM
I hope it died ..... creepy animals and very, very deadly poison! - Good luck in the contest Sara. - Watch out for snakes. -oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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