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a plump turkey struts

a plump turkey struts across the leaf filled farmyard-- smells cranberry sauce

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Date: 12/15/2011 9:59:00 PM
another fun one I remember. Ok, here is a clue how to do the heads/tails contest. Google words that do not use e. And words that do not use a. (I think heads is easier to do than tails) You will see many words and then just write down the ones that also do not use h/d/or s. Then take those words and form a poem around them. you can DO it.
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Date: 11/7/2011 10:10:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Debbie Guzzi's sponsored contest "Give Thanks" Jack. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/7/2011 8:31:00 AM
hmm... i am wondering if the judge totally missed what you were trying to say? i'm sure the turkey is very grateful to be alive! congratulations on your win!
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Date: 11/6/2011 9:56:00 PM
And sits next to the mashed potatoes. Congratulations on your win in the Give Thanks contest Jack.
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Date: 11/6/2011 7:28:00 PM
Congrats, Jack. Great write. Nice going. Best to you and yours. Ralph
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Date: 11/6/2011 6:22:00 PM
Congrats jack on your HM for give thankxx contest luv.. a superb write my friend....
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Date: 11/6/2011 5:40:00 PM
Nice Haiku Jack. Agape, Moses
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Date: 11/1/2011 11:13:00 AM
Thank you for sharing your amazing poetry with us and for your kind comments on my writing Jack. Love, Carol
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Date: 10/29/2011 11:29:00 AM
You have me smiling with this one. Thank you for your kind comment on my haiku. I hope you continue to work on this form as it is one that--though very competitive--has a lot of publication potential. If you would like a couple of resources that I've found helpful, please Soup Mail me. Keep on writing!! Karen
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Date: 10/29/2011 9:48:00 AM
my poor chicken loves BBQ chicken. so sad.
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Date: 10/28/2011 11:08:00 PM
jack, I just read your comment to my comment. WEll, in MY haiku world, I kind of like the before and after effect!! btw, I think I read this incorrectly the first time. the turkey is smelling the cranberry sauce at the same time he struts across the yard. So it IS to form!!
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Date: 10/28/2011 11:06:00 PM
jack thanks for asking. My back may be getting slowly better as my arm/shoulder slowly heals. All this week was ok until tonight. I need to hurry and get an ice pack. haha. Luv, Andrea
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Date: 10/28/2011 5:19:00 PM
You have learned how to correctly title the haiku, you have learned not to captalize or punctuate,, you have learned to use a season word, you have learned the concept of a juxtaposed fragement or sentence YOU are growing in the right direction!!! better! L & L
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Date: 10/28/2011 4:10:00 PM
I've already commented on this poem, but I wanted to tell you that I am a student, a Senior, at an University here in Ohio! I'm an older student but this college has a lot of older students so it's not awkward. I'm at my final trimester of classes and these two classes are extremely difficult. I'm worried about being able to pass these classes here at the university. And I'm so close to graduating, I'll get my degree January 8th, but the end of the trimester is the middle of December! more later
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Date: 10/28/2011 2:46:00 PM
LOL you got the 2 part thingie right! not sure about line 3 being a good choice for a juxtaposition....because we can't see the turkey alive and dead in the same scene aye??? stay with lines 1 & 2 think what else scensory can be going on at the same time? a smell? that might bring to mind Thanksgiving but not TELL us it is thanks giving and still be possible within the same scene..........Light & Love [work]
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Date: 10/28/2011 3:51:00 AM
very nice thanksgiving write jack.Enjoyed.
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Date: 10/28/2011 12:41:00 AM
I really like THIS one, Jack. Great before and after "picture."
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 10/28/2011 2:47:00 PM
except haiku doesn't do..before and after ;)
Date: 10/27/2011 5:14:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your very descriptive work..If for a contest, reads like a winner...I can just see that turkey struting..Thanks for stopping by, reading, and commenting on my work..Sara
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Date: 10/27/2011 2:05:00 PM
soon enough will be upon us and your lines penned will come true Jack .. we are having a big dinner at our new home with everyone.. before my son leaves for military life again..oh..
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Date: 10/27/2011 1:41:00 PM
Awesome write Jack! Poor turkey, it's time for Thanksgiving! And I'm ready to eat that very Turkey! ...oh, is that a bad thing? Incredible poem!!
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