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A New York Love Story

Two waiting for a train met. Instantly,
they found themselves the recipients of
a thing that neither thought they’d ever see -
that crazy thing “at first sight” known as love

They’d said their names to one another, yet
their last names they’d not given, when by chance
the girl got shoved and somehow could not get
aboard the train. She lost her new romance!

New York is a big city! Three years passed.
They searched, but neither found the other one.
Gloom was a cloud above them till at last,
the girl spied one wet day her ray of sun!

Right there in front of her, that young man stood.
It was as if their cloudy years of pain
were washed away forever. Oh, how good
they both felt in that sudden burst of rain!

Oct 28, 2018 For Brenda Chiri's Tell Me A Story Poetry Contest
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Sefunmi Avatar
November 18, 2018 at 3:36 PM
It was good they found each other. Lovely write and congrats on your win.
Duet Avatar
November 15, 2018 at 7:33 PM
I love a love story with a good ending and this clever poem/story definitely has that "feel good" ending. Congrats on your win too, Andrea.
Raven Avatar
November 12, 2018 at 3:12 PM
Hi Andrea, congratulations on your win with this well deserved piece. have a wonderful Monday. hugs....Mike. XX
Gauthier Avatar
November 11, 2018 at 7:08 PM
How sweet, Andrea. Congrats on your top win. Well penned.
Krampe Avatar
November 10, 2018 at 7:05 PM
Lovely story, Andrea. Congrats on your win.
Marcum Wong Avatar
November 10, 2018 at 5:18 PM
Yay Andrea! Congratulations on your number one placement in Brenda's contest! I loved the romance in your story and your happy ending! : )
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November 5, 2018 at 11:30 AM
When it is true love, there is a desire and that desire and passion has the power to turn fate, for anything which is done with true heart has the power to succeed, this was a really wonderful poem and I absolutely love reading it, especially the happy ending, I wish you best of luck in the contest, good luck and have a really nice day
Johnson Avatar
November 2, 2018 at 12:53 AM
I love a happy ending. Especially when it comes to affairs of the heart. :)
Godwin Avatar
November 1, 2018 at 10:36 PM
I'm thinking she should be played by Meg Ryan and that before the credits role, we'll need tissues. I see your fictional romance won - congrats. Came to see if you'd done a SHAPE - I finally did and I don't care if it's good or not, just that it's done. I doubt I'll ever do another. Breaks my heart that you missed 'your' movie! Love ... CayCay
Messina Avatar
October 30, 2018 at 9:15 PM
Sounds like raindrops were falling on their head..lol Love this Andrea, I worked in Manhattan almost 20 years! Good luck in the contest...Charlie
Gondolf Avatar
October 30, 2018 at 7:58 AM
What a sweet story, Andrea, best of luck. John
Man Avatar
October 29, 2018 at 4:37 PM
You had me with your title and won me with your words.. you’re so gifted sweet girl!!
May Avatar
October 29, 2018 at 2:05 PM
Beautifully rendered Andrea..
Callus Avatar
October 29, 2018 at 12:00 PM
So 'love at first sight' does exist! I believe that when the moment is ripe, Love herself comes looking for us! I hoped for a happy ending, and you did not disappoint. Regards // paul
Michael Avatar
October 29, 2018 at 11:52 AM
Would make a lovely movie...Nice idea...All the best Andrea
Lamoureux Avatar
October 29, 2018 at 9:36 AM
I love happy endings!
Green Avatar
October 29, 2018 at 9:20 AM
Definitely a happily ever after story that will do very well in the contest. This one touched my heart Andrea.
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October 29, 2018 at 7:33 AM
Ah, Caren beat me to my comment- hahaha! This reminded me of Serendipity, too, in all the best ways! ;) Such a beautifully penned and touching story...
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October 28, 2018 at 11:20 PM
Andrea, this reminds me of the movie Serendipity which I thought was adorable. Same premise, but much lovelier in a poem. Good luck in the contest.
Anish Avatar
October 28, 2018 at 6:49 PM
Hopeful poem about my home city! I posted a poem about the terrible event in Pittsburgh. Let me know what you think! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
Bauer Avatar
October 28, 2018 at 5:57 PM
andrea - your brilliant rhyming really made this poem come alive to me! i love this - best of luck in the contest...
Cunningham Avatar
October 28, 2018 at 5:15 PM
Lovely story Andrea with a happy ending. Good luck. Tom.
Pandit Avatar
October 28, 2018 at 3:45 PM
Happy reunion..when it is meant to be! Certainly they're meant for each other. Best for a win, Andrea.
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