A New Day of Praise

The child set the wood against her raised chin
High up, to place the very last big piece
No less assured of her father's great praise
Than at anytime had ever she been
Wanting to fulfill his expectations
Of a child who was very brave and strong
But could not draw the water from deep well
For the rope was much to long__well deep
My father loved me so so much he did
He always came to my aide__ease my load
By telling me (my child) that's too heavy a load
As I drew that heavy water, each turn
Would get much harder_just in nick of time
There he would step by my side__reach for rope
Ease the strain, ease my load _my father_(my) guide
As the red sun rises, the birds chirp thank you Father for this day

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 6/9/2010 7:16:00 PM
Hi Sara :) What a very inspiring write to read this morning--I really enjoyed the metaphors here, how this could mean about your earthly and Heavenly Fathers--:) --It truly is wonderful how we are taken care of...thanks for sharing this--nikko :)
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Date: 6/9/2010 6:37:00 AM
I love the message conveyed in this one Sara - rgds Wilma
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Date: 6/9/2010 5:57:00 AM
Well done and said Sara, this one sounds like a good plan. I will read it one more time. by the way I got your s.m., and I returned you one. Have a nice one. Yes and Good morning,..Sidney LeeAnn
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Date: 6/9/2010 5:53:00 AM
I don't think it falls into narrative, or romanticism, I guess your options are 'blank verse', 'free verse' or 'verse' have a look and see what you think
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Date: 6/9/2010 4:40:00 AM
This poem paints a lovley scene, I enjoyed reading it, don't think the form shold be rhyme though
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