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a compassionate moon _ absorbing the suffering of innocents A Monoku contest hosted by James Edward Lee Sr. Based on Picture 3 Placed 2nd 7th April, 2018

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Date: 11/7/2018 12:19:00 PM
A great Monoku will make you stop and think... and that's just what yours has done. Well done! Regards, John,
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Paul Callus
Date: 11/7/2018 1:17:00 PM
Thank you for the meaningful comments, John...and for liking! Regards // paul
Date: 6/1/2018 7:58:00 PM
Paul, this is a fabulous verse. So many innocents are damaged without our knowledge , but wanting someone to reach out...
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Date: 6/2/2018 9:11:00 AM
Thank you for reading, liking and commenting, Eve:) Hugs // paul
Date: 4/27/2018 7:01:00 PM
Yes, the moon is always there, like an old friend, to provide peace and solace when needed ... This is a lovely poem, Paul. I really enjoyed it!
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Date: 4/28/2018 4:14:00 PM
Thank you, Kelly. A pleasure to see you back on Soup; your absence has not gone unnoticed:) Hope you're keeping well. Regards // paul
Date: 4/21/2018 7:32:00 PM
Beautiful and deep, Paul. Congratulations on your podium win. Sandra
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Date: 4/23/2018 11:26:00 AM
Thank you, Sandra. Your lovely feedback is appreciated. Regards // paul
Date: 4/21/2018 5:13:00 PM
For me, yours was also a first placer!!
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Date: 4/23/2018 11:25:00 AM
You are very kind, Andrea. I'll have you as my judge, any day:) Regards // paul
Date: 4/21/2018 3:31:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Paul. Tom
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Date: 4/23/2018 11:24:00 AM
Thank you, Tom. Best regards // paul
Date: 4/21/2018 6:20:00 AM
- Congratulations on your winning poem, Paul :) - Great written :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 4/23/2018 11:23:00 AM
Thank you, Anne-Lise. I saw you standing high with your gold medal:) Hugs // paul
Date: 4/21/2018 12:47:00 AM
Back to congratulate you on your win. Well done!
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Date: 4/23/2018 11:21:00 AM
That's very kind of you, Susan...thank you. Regards // paul
Date: 4/20/2018 11:54:00 PM
Lovely, Paul. A most deserving silver medal winner. Congrats.
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Date: 4/23/2018 11:21:00 AM
Thank you, Line. You too deserved your winner's medal. Regards // paul
Date: 4/14/2018 5:13:00 PM
Excellent! Profound and gently written message.
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Date: 4/14/2018 5:54:00 PM
Your 'excellent' and 'profound' comments are greatly appreciated, Susan...thank you! Regards // paul
Date: 4/11/2018 5:34:00 PM
Your words go perfectly with the picture, Paul. A very creative approach that brings life to the moon as it bleeds for the pain below. Outstanding!
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Date: 4/12/2018 1:38:00 PM
Hi Carolyn! How lovely to see you posting and commenting! Thank you for enjoying my compassionate moon. ~ I have been ultra busy and I've got a lot of catching up to do. Hugs // paul
Date: 4/11/2018 5:01:00 PM
Just as Susan said ...breathtaking Paul :)
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FJ Thomas
Date: 4/12/2018 3:27:00 PM
Lol it's not like you hadn't already figured me out.
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Paul Callus
Date: 4/12/2018 1:34:00 PM
Thank you, Flo. Addressing a shadow has not been an easy task...so pleased that at last I'm able write your real name:) Regards // paul
Date: 4/8/2018 7:25:00 PM
Metaphorically breathtaking Paul. As poignant as it is beautiful, this deep and moving poem pulls at my heartstrings yet it is comforting as well.. best wishes for a win but already a winner with me :)) Warmest wishes and hugs, my dear friend. ~Susan
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Susan Ashley
Date: 4/9/2018 4:11:00 PM
Ha! Listening to the Stones classic music sure does bring back memories, doesn't it Paul..? I spent half my time just getting lost in their music while writing the pantoum so it took me twice as long to finish it.. Lol! Thank you for your awesome comments on my poem my wonderful friend :))
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Date: 4/9/2018 3:33:00 PM
Thank you, Susan. I appreciate your lovely comments, and the faith you show in this one-liner! [After reading your Pantoum I just had to go to You Tube and now I have Rolling Stones music playing in the background!] ~ Warm regards & Hugs, my friend. // paul
Date: 4/8/2018 12:37:00 PM
VERY good, Paul, making it a metaphor as well!! (Yes, I enjoy trying to make them 17 syllables, never more than that!)
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Date: 4/9/2018 2:52:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea. [Yes, to me 17 syllables is the maximum, after all it's related to haiku!] Regards // paul
Date: 4/8/2018 7:36:00 AM
- Excellent, Paul :) - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 4/8/2018 7:50:00 AM
Thank you, Anne-Lise. Your 'excellent' is much appreciated:) Hugs // paul
Date: 4/8/2018 2:21:00 AM
Well said Paul, I really liked this!
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Date: 4/8/2018 7:26:00 AM
Thank you, Arthur. Hope you're keeping well. Regards // paul
Date: 4/7/2018 5:49:00 PM
Oh simply beautiful, Paul! Hugs :)
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Date: 4/8/2018 7:27:00 AM
Love your reaction, Akkina...thank you! Smiles & Hugs // paul
Date: 4/7/2018 1:50:00 PM
In recent times we have seen so much suffering of innocents.Great write Paul.
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Date: 4/8/2018 7:29:00 AM
So true, Tom, but life must go on; we can't allow fear to control our lives. Regards // paul
Date: 4/7/2018 11:17:00 AM
Imagery well captured..I like your interpretation Paul..best for a win.
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Paul Callus
Date: 4/8/2018 5:26:00 AM
Thank you for the faith you show in my entry, Vijay. Have a good day. // paul
Date: 4/7/2018 11:08:00 AM
Very touching this is Paul! Well done! :)
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Paul Callus
Date: 4/8/2018 5:25:00 AM
So glad you like it, Heidi...thank you:) Regards // paul
Date: 4/7/2018 10:17:00 AM
Nicely done, Paul!
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Paul Callus
Date: 4/7/2018 5:09:00 PM
Glad you like it, Kim...thank you! Regards // paul
Date: 4/7/2018 9:08:00 AM
beautifully penned monoku, good luck Paul:-) hugs Jan xx
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Paul Callus
Date: 4/7/2018 9:43:00 AM
Thank you, Jan. I'm still mulling over whether or not to change 'suffering' to 'blood'! Hugs // paul