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A Monoku In Red

a compassionate moon _ absorbing the suffering of innocents



A Monoku contest hosted by James Edward Lee Sr.
Based on Picture 3
Placed 2nd
7th April, 2018
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Michaels Avatar
November 7, 2018 at 12:19 PM
A great Monoku will make you stop and think... and that's just what yours has done. Well done! Regards, John,
Callus Avatar
November 7, 2018 at 1:17 PM
Thank you for the meaningful comments, John...and for liking! Regards // paul
Roper Avatar
June 1, 2018 at 7:58 PM
Paul, this is a fabulous verse. So many innocents are damaged without our knowledge , but wanting someone to reach out...
Callus Avatar
June 2, 2018 at 9:11 AM
Thank you for reading, liking and commenting, Eve:) Hugs // paul
Deschler Avatar
April 27, 2018 at 7:01 PM
Yes, the moon is always there, like an old friend, to provide peace and solace when needed ... This is a lovely poem, Paul. I really enjoyed it!
Callus Avatar
April 28, 2018 at 4:14 PM
Thank you, Kelly. A pleasure to see you back on Soup; your absence has not gone unnoticed:) Hope you're keeping well. Regards // paul
Haight Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 7:32 PM
Beautiful and deep, Paul. Congratulations on your podium win. Sandra
Callus Avatar
April 23, 2018 at 11:26 AM
Thank you, Sandra. Your lovely feedback is appreciated. Regards // paul
Dietrich Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 5:13 PM
For me, yours was also a first placer!!
Callus Avatar
April 23, 2018 at 11:25 AM
You are very kind, Andrea. I'll have you as my judge, any day:) Regards // paul
Cunningham Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 3:31 PM
Congratulations on your win Paul. Tom
Callus Avatar
April 23, 2018 at 11:24 AM
Thank you, Tom. Best regards // paul
Andresen Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 6:20 AM
- Congratulations on your winning poem, Paul :) - Great written :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Callus Avatar
April 23, 2018 at 11:23 AM
Thank you, Anne-Lise. I saw you standing high with your gold medal:) Hugs // paul
Gentry Avatar
April 21, 2018 at 12:47 AM
Back to congratulate you on your win. Well done!
Callus Avatar
April 23, 2018 at 11:21 AM
That's very kind of you, Susan...thank you. Regards // paul
Gauthier Avatar
April 20, 2018 at 11:54 PM
Lovely, Paul. A most deserving silver medal winner. Congrats.
Callus Avatar
April 23, 2018 at 11:21 AM
Thank you, Line. You too deserved your winner's medal. Regards // paul
Gentry Avatar
April 14, 2018 at 5:13 PM
Excellent! Profound and gently written message.
Callus Avatar
April 14, 2018 at 5:54 PM
Your 'excellent' and 'profound' comments are greatly appreciated, Susan...thank you! Regards // paul
Devonshire Avatar
April 11, 2018 at 5:34 PM
Your words go perfectly with the picture, Paul. A very creative approach that brings life to the moon as it bleeds for the pain below. Outstanding!
Callus Avatar
April 12, 2018 at 1:38 PM
Hi Carolyn! How lovely to see you posting and commenting! Thank you for enjoying my compassionate moon. ~ I have been ultra busy and I've got a lot of catching up to do. Hugs // paul
Thomas Avatar
April 11, 2018 at 5:01 PM
Just as Susan said ...breathtaking Paul :)
Thomas Avatar
April 12, 2018 at 3:27 PM
Lol it's not like you hadn't already figured me out.
Callus Avatar
April 12, 2018 at 1:34 PM
Thank you, Flo. Addressing a shadow has not been an easy task...so pleased that at last I'm able write your real name:) Regards // paul
Ashley Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 7:25 PM
Metaphorically breathtaking Paul. As poignant as it is beautiful, this deep and moving poem pulls at my heartstrings yet it is comforting as well.. best wishes for a win but already a winner with me :)) Warmest wishes and hugs, my dear friend. ~Susan
Ashley Avatar
April 9, 2018 at 4:11 PM
Ha! Listening to the Stones classic music sure does bring back memories, doesn't it Paul..? I spent half my time just getting lost in their music while writing the pantoum so it took me twice as long to finish it.. Lol! Thank you for your awesome comments on my poem my wonderful friend :))
Callus Avatar
April 9, 2018 at 3:33 PM
Thank you, Susan. I appreciate your lovely comments, and the faith you show in this one-liner! [After reading your Pantoum I just had to go to You Tube and now I have Rolling Stones music playing in the background!] ~ Warm regards & Hugs, my friend. // paul
Dietrich Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 12:37 PM
VERY good, Paul, making it a metaphor as well!! (Yes, I enjoy trying to make them 17 syllables, never more than that!)
Callus Avatar
April 9, 2018 at 2:52 PM
Thank you, Andrea. [Yes, to me 17 syllables is the maximum, after all it's related to haiku!] Regards // paul
Andresen Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 7:36 AM
- Excellent, Paul :) - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Callus Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 7:50 AM
Thank you, Anne-Lise. Your 'excellent' is much appreciated:) Hugs // paul
Vaso Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 2:21 AM
Well said Paul, I really liked this!
Callus Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 7:26 AM
Thank you, Arthur. Hope you're keeping well. Regards // paul
Downing  Avatar
April 7, 2018 at 5:49 PM
Oh simply beautiful, Paul! Hugs :)
Callus Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 7:27 AM
Love your reaction, Akkina...thank you! Smiles & Hugs // paul
Cunningham Avatar
April 7, 2018 at 1:50 PM
In recent times we have seen so much suffering of innocents.Great write Paul.
Callus Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 7:29 AM
So true, Tom, but life must go on; we can't allow fear to control our lives. Regards // paul
Pandit Avatar
April 7, 2018 at 11:17 AM
Imagery well captured..I like your interpretation Paul..best for a win.
Callus Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 5:26 AM
Thank you for the faith you show in my entry, Vijay. Have a good day. // paul
Sands Avatar
April 7, 2018 at 11:08 AM
Very touching this is Paul! Well done! :)
Callus Avatar
April 8, 2018 at 5:25 AM
So glad you like it, Heidi...thank you:) Regards // paul
Rodrigues Avatar
April 7, 2018 at 10:17 AM
Nicely done, Paul!
Callus Avatar
April 7, 2018 at 5:09 PM
Glad you like it, Kim...thank you! Regards // paul
Allison Avatar
April 7, 2018 at 9:08 AM
beautifully penned monoku, good luck Paul:-) hugs Jan xx
Callus Avatar
April 7, 2018 at 9:43 AM
Thank you, Jan. I'm still mulling over whether or not to change 'suffering' to 'blood'! Hugs // paul
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