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A Mirror

A MIRROR
I breathed into a mirror
With breath soft and warm,
My finger etched an image
That began to take a form.

I breathed into a mirror
But it wasn't very plain.
It disappeared out of sight
So I had to breathe again.

I breathed into a mirror
Etching images to view,
None would ever be the same
Surprising what breath can do.

I breathed into a mirror
And quickly wrote "I love you".
but these words soon vanished
Yet still they remain so true.

Copyright © Vivien Wade  April 6. 2014

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Vivien Wade Date: 7/5/2017 6:21:00 PM Thanks again for your reply. Good to hear from you. Would like to know how you would treat the last verse differently. I'm still learning. Blessings, Vivien, (Scarlett) Login to Reply

Daniel Turner Date: 7/5/2017 10:22:00 AM Surprise ending, Scarlett. Me being a cynical person, I would have taken the last verse a different direction. I enjoyed the read:) Login to Reply

Vivien Wade Date: 7/5/2017 2:34:00 AM Thanks Andrew. I watched a TV program where they were teaching old folk art by etching by breathing into a mirror. Was fascinating. Blessings, Vivien Login to Reply

Andrew Walker Date: 7/5/2017 2:05:00 AM I really like the repeated line at the start of each stanza and how the last stanza stood out from the last, a bit of an emotional turn. great job! Login to Reply