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Premiere Contest WinnerA Metronome In Perpetuum

In a blink of an eye
my stoic attitude had fled
             deep
               dark
                  daze
I'm overwhelmed with thrills and terror
I take calm, breaths to contain myself

panic
   is a 
       mirror image 
        of distress
          from 
            limitless 
          duplicated  
  ill intents

as walls rose so did mystery and fearful sound
Inside, fortifications are bolstered
my head is full of guilt, concern, and sadness
wriggling brain distributes tendrils
like suffocating vines
throat was wrapped around them

but don’t 
      fall, as well 
         frightened
           when you 
              swathe 
          mirror 
      with your 
 strife,

pull the string continuously, there's no end
there are no end or last word
there is no rest, sleep, or death
claw on my face and nails at my neck
my fingertips irritate my eyes
staggered up to a mirror, ripping its glass 
 
and
     a vision 
           gazes
               right
                 back 
           at you,
      revealing
   brawniness 
  to 
persist in

like a prison of endless march and bloody drag
never-ending loop, breaking day
unending hunger, clicking drumbeats, eternity
fall on green grass in the heavenly sea
white stars shine during the day
magpies humming mating

Written: October 10, 2022

A Brian Strand Premiere Choice Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Brian Strand
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Kendrick Avatar
October 12, 2022 at 10:16 AM
Back with congratulations on your lightning strike design winning work. Way to go. Sara
Kauffman Avatar
October 12, 2022 at 9:42 AM
Lasaad, what a personal journey you have taken us on with this poem of transparency in vibrant images and poetic pictures. The formatting reinforces the ups and downs of a personal pilgrimage! Congratulations on your win my friend. Blessings for your journey!
Rose  Avatar
October 10, 2022 at 3:43 PM
wow, you wrote a masterpiece to be proud of, nice one Sotto
Trifiatis Avatar
October 10, 2022 at 2:35 PM
A panorama of feelings, thoughts, and ideas that are displaying the beauty of your poetic ability, my dearest friend, Lasaad. Impressive! Be blessed!
Kendrick Avatar
October 10, 2022 at 9:43 AM
Reads like a good contender for the contest. Very expressive and descriptive work. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page. Sara
Horsman Avatar
October 10, 2022 at 6:44 AM
Wow, Lasaad the last time i wrote a poem like this, is when i was withdrawing from some bad medication. I like the shape the constant falling giving the reader the feel of the abyss. All in all a well constructed poem, Harry
Pandit Avatar
October 10, 2022 at 5:57 AM
Highly emotive write my friend. Your creativity on display throughout.
Buhagiar Avatar
October 10, 2022 at 2:55 AM
great composition. Always interesting.
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