A Little Deception

When you and your friends are at the bar, 
you spot a lovely women from afar. 
How do I talk to her, thinking of a scheme. 
He asked a friend to work as a team.

“Go stand by her, when I get up, quickly walk outside.”
I don't know if this plan will work, but at least I tried.
His friend goes over and minute later he stands up.
He walks over and stops her from drinking the cup.

“Ma'am don't, that guy just put something in your drink.”
“Who did? Where did he go?” “I scared him off I think.”
“Thank you, you could have just saved my life right there.”
“Yeah that guy didn't look right, mind if I pull up a chair?”

The rest of the night went better than great.
Since I was her savior, she said yes to a date.
Is this genius or criminal, that's for you to decide.
But it was sure fun doing it and going for the ride.


**For Natalie's contest "Genius or Criminal?"***

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 9/30/2011 11:23:00 PM
HI Chis....this is one clever write...I believe guys still pull off this chick prank at bars and night clubs. Preying on any lil honey they can. How unfortunate. I wonder what the profile of these women are? A winning write....sure made me think....my girls are growing up and I hope this never happens to them...let alone, hope they won't go to bars. :)
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Date: 9/30/2011 12:59:00 PM
Now that is one clever way to win a lady's trust, Chris. I wonder if this is actually done by men who want to meet women. Congratulations on your well-deserved top win! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 9/29/2011 11:16:00 AM
Wow Matt-You are always at the top of my contests! I love this one..great job!
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Date: 9/29/2011 11:16:00 AM
Sorry Chris I meant! I'm sure that's not the first time someone called you Matt :)
Date: 9/29/2011 7:16:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in this contest that took a lot of thought to write and present so skillfully Chris. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/29/2011 5:48:00 AM
Congratulations on the win in the contest of Natalie, Chris
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Date: 9/29/2011 12:37:00 AM
It's very clever. Now if this pretend "savior" turns around and actually gives her a date rape pill later on, then it's criminal; otherwise, he's GENIUS. Congrats on your big win!
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Date: 9/29/2011 12:15:00 AM
Congratulations on your first place win, wow when I went to bars, we didn't have to worry about someone slipping something into your drink. Well done. Lee
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Date: 9/28/2011 8:23:00 PM
congrats on your wonderful win cory
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Date: 9/28/2011 7:55:00 PM
Congrats Chris on first place win with this dynamic poetry in Natalie's cool contest and theme.. dazzling delight..luv..
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