A Kiss Goodby?

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Cold metal trains pressing refrains on hard steel tracks,
Racing ever, changing never the lyrics of clickety clack.
Loved ones scurrying, hurrying, never worrying,
They may never be riding back,
In the cold metal trains pressing refrains on hard steel tracks,
Racing ever, changing never the lyrics of clickety clack.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 1/9/2010 5:54:00 PM
A great line "pressing refrains. . ." Relating the train to lyrics. Love when you are clever! Thanks for all your comment today and again, for the tribute. Luv, andrea
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Date: 12/30/2009 4:28:00 AM
All aboard! You got the groove in on this one Bob. Where's the caboose? lol...Enjoyable read my friend. Great rhyme scheme. Well done and God Bless...Taz
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Date: 12/19/2009 3:33:00 PM
Dear Robert: Love the rhythm in this poem. Thanks for reading my poem. I'm so very glad that you liked it! Love, Janice Herzog xoxo
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Date: 12/16/2009 4:54:00 AM
I love this ... good write
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Date: 12/11/2009 1:10:00 AM
This was beautiful. =) You are a very good poet. Also, thank you for your comments. :)
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Date: 12/9/2009 2:46:00 PM
very good!! sad but so true!
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Date: 12/9/2009 2:02:00 PM
I like the use of your words here, Robert, so fluent and fluid.. enjoyed this rhyme.. blessings... luv... Linda-Marie, P.E.P.S. "Sweetheart"
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Date: 12/8/2009 7:20:00 PM
Superb imagery you have conveyed here Robert ..thought provoking and so sad....thanks so much for sharing and for your kind comments~Mary
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Date: 12/8/2009 4:44:00 PM
nice rhyming. john
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Date: 12/8/2009 4:13:00 PM
Seems kinda a sad write here in this one. Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara
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Date: 12/8/2009 12:44:00 PM
Got to get off that train! It leads to despair. A nice and fun short write. Thanks for sharing. Besgt wishes, Caroline.
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Date: 12/8/2009 9:23:00 AM
Nice one.Just wanted to say hi and hope all is well.
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