A Horse a bit Hoasre, Off Course, of Course

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Poetic Form; Rhyme
Inspired: 2023 December 09
Image: Pegasus by Elftown Art

pegasus - Percy Jackson and the Olympians Photo (13395322) - Fanpop

*P - Pegasus O - Other horses Pegasus, the winged horse Olympus flew off course Stallion horse that's male land in a grassy dale horses came up to him sources to say his name P - Pegasus. forwards a pony addresses O - Sounds Greek to me. P - It should be, P - I am from Greece, P - by the Aegean Sea. now all at peace. P - But before I go home, P - I go to La La Land, P - then on to Rome. O - That land is a dreamland, O - but wait, you no go back, O - you go to that place? P - All roads lead home, no offtrack. O - But, La La, Dream, it's out in space. P - It's okay, I got wings. O - Okay, take the second star to the right, ... P - No attached strings? O - No you'll be alright. O - And then, straight on till morning ...

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/10/2023 8:44:00 AM

So, this is conversational poetry. Creative work. I wonder if Pegasus found his way home. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Your visits to my page add a special touch. Sara K

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/10/2023 9:08:00 AM

Of Pegasus, mayhaps 'tis a series be, if I've a mind to remember. If not, he'll hook up--not Capt'n Hook, but Peter Pan whose line I stole to tether my piece. BTW, yes for I will be posting one soon, and with that, my friend--eternal thanks. Aloha, William

Silent One

Date: 12/10/2023 7:26:00 AM

Very creative Hilo.. fantasy always helps with our words as we can be as creative as we want.. that is the beauty of poetic license...

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/10/2023 7:42:00 AM

Exactly, Silent One. Spread those wings and tether upon the oddities in the creative world, my friend, thanks. Aloha, William

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/10/2023 5:18:00 AM

creative write, William. I enjoyed the Pegasus references with their underlying meanings.

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/10/2023 7:18:00 AM

I am grateful for your sharing visit, Sara. Aloha, William

Ink Empress

Date: 12/9/2023 10:32:00 PM

I always love a bit of mythology in poetry. And i love how you’ve written about pegasus. Poseidon's winged horse and ao many others Gods of Greek, had pegasus in their tales. The flow of this is beautiful and i also especially loved the line “ land in a grassy dale“ “ But, La La, Dream, it's out in space.It's okay, I got wings” Creative one dear Hilo. Pleasure always reading your work.

Hilo Poet
Date: 12/10/2023 7:16:00 AM

I appreciate it, Ink Empress. Touch of fantasy made alive drawing out characters anew along the old storyline of Neverland. Also appreciate your highlighted notations. Aloha, William