A Hampshire Day In May 1976
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I have just removed the word 'and' from the second line of the above write I think it works a little
better..' Joe..
The damp night had brought a pearly dawn
Lush green grass stood ankle deep late morn
And there glistening sleek stood a brand new Rolls
In chocolate brown metallic, over seamless gold.
A group of people are looking on,
It must have cost a good deal said one, come on!
It cost ten thousand the young man said
There were intakes of breath, and the shaking of heads.
I am just back from the states another man said
Over there that’s $25,000, the conversation went dead.
The year is now 2010; $10,000 would not buy a Mercedes-Benz
Or even a small Ford (with extra on loan) or it might pay you
8 months rent, it’ll depend on your “zone”.
© Joe Maverick 29-09-2010
Copyright © Joe Maverick | Year Posted 2010
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