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A Change of Address

Summer storm flooding in city cemetery. Moving day at last! Author notes: This is a Bible-based Haiku. To understand it please read 1 Thes. 4:16 and 1 Cor. 15:52

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Michael Newman

Date: 11/20/2014 7:55:00 AM

The connection literally brings to mind coffins floating down the street? See the other connection also.Not sure if I can rate the Hospital Haiku but I wanted to place a 6 on it .Regards miken

Darlene Gifford
Date: 11/20/2014 4:09:00 PM

Thank you Michael for your advice! I posted the poem and got 4 positive comments already! I'm very surprised. But pleasantly.

Darlene Gifford
Date: 11/20/2014 10:10:00 AM

Thank you for your guidance and encouragement, Miken, I will go for it! However, I do not expect many replies, if any. Maybe negative ones saying it is too graphic! Well, we'll see.

Michael Newman
Date: 11/20/2014 9:02:00 AM

Well, it would not be fair for me to guide your poetry. I find that from the original draft, rework on word and structure happens . go for it ...see what response you get. Miken

Darlene Gifford
Date: 11/20/2014 8:27:00 AM

Hi, Michael, Strange it brought to your mind coffins floating down the street! My original thoughts were just that! The last line read, "Bodies by a box." meaning the bodies had floated down to the houses and were found by their mail box.My title was, "Mail Delivery" I thought the poem was too graphic, so I changed it. What do you think? should I post the original or was I correct in thinking it was too graphic Should I post my original thoughts. I value your input.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 9/16/2014 5:50:00 PM

Great Haiku.

Darlene Gifford
Date: 9/16/2014 7:31:00 PM

You know the saying. "ashes to ashes, dust to dust," But when the Lord returns, all the dead in Christ will have a new address, with celestial bodies. Thanks, Maurice.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/13/2014 11:39:00 AM

Hahaha, nice haiku, Dariene

Darlene Gifford
Date: 9/13/2014 3:39:00 PM

Thank you, Dr. Ram. Any day I can give someone a laugh, is a good day for me! :)