Gordon Mcconnell Poet Rhyme

A Bottle So Noteworthy

Walking along the sandy seashore
late on summer evening so cool
such peaceful scene everything so still
what a tranquil setting such a pull

For a number of hours there I was
spending these moments step by step
then out of the blue floating on top
so very clear looking so very in debt

But this looked elusive indeed
out of hands grasp it seems
then with quickness seemingly came
over these succulent soft streams

Eventually, my fingers found its touch
there deep inside a little note
took it out seeing only three words
its passion loose having no coat

A bottle so noteworthy
with no details what to do
mere words but so powerful
simply short saying I love you!

(A fictional piece I have written some years ago. )

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Christina Bowring September 9, 2023 at 1:54 PM This is such a lovely poem Gordon. So well written and very romantic. Like SV says, what is the reason for the note? Perhaps you could do a sequel so we can find out? Loved it. Thank you for sharing. Blessings. Gordon Mcconnell September 10, 2023 at 4:53 AM Thanks Christina Glad you found this such a lovely poem and you loved it so much. You have given me food for thought about a sequel, so maybe in the coming months! Blessings always,Gordon

Speaks Volumes August 27, 2023 at 2:16 PM The mind conjures up all sorts of stories for the reason for the note. This is a thought provoking poem that will have me thinking of stories to fit it all day !! I love it thanks Gordon. Cheers. Gordon Mcconnell August 27, 2023 at 2:47 PM Thanks SV, So pleased you found this one to be so thought provoking and you loved it. Blessings always,Gordon