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A Bottle So Noteworthy

Walking along the sandy seashore late on summer evening so cool such peaceful scene everything so still what a tranquil setting such a pull For a number of hours there I was spending these moments step by step then out of the blue floating on top so very clear looking so very in debt But this looked elusive indeed out of hands grasp it seems then with quickness seemingly came over these succulent soft streams Eventually, my fingers found its touch there deep inside a little note took it out seeing only three words its passion loose having no coat A bottle so noteworthy with no details what to do mere words but so powerful simply short saying I love you! (A fictional piece I have written some years ago. )

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Date: 9/9/2023 1:54:00 PM
This is such a lovely poem Gordon. So well written and very romantic. Like SV says, what is the reason for the note? Perhaps you could do a sequel so we can find out? Loved it. Thank you for sharing. Blessings.
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Gordon Mcconnell
Date: 9/10/2023 4:53:00 AM
Thanks Christina Glad you found this such a lovely poem and you loved it so much. You have given me food for thought about a sequel, so maybe in the coming months! Blessings always,Gordon
Date: 8/27/2023 2:16:00 PM
The mind conjures up all sorts of stories for the reason for the note. This is a thought provoking poem that will have me thinking of stories to fit it all day !! I love it thanks Gordon. Cheers.
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Gordon Mcconnell
Date: 8/27/2023 2:47:00 PM
Thanks SV, So pleased you found this one to be so thought provoking and you loved it. Blessings always,Gordon

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